Do you agree or disagree with the following statement: Work has a bigger impact on your overall happiness than your social life.
We spend most of our waking hours in work and because of that it is necessary that it fulfils our needs. Although some may argue that your social life have larger influence, I strongly agree with the statement. My view is based on professional and financial grounds, and in the subsequent paragraphs, I will support my major reasons with examples.
First of all, choosing your carrer for life is not a simple decision and one have to pick their path so it can provide all intelectual stimulations crucial for their developement. Even though some may believe that work is just eight hours of a boredom, others think about it as your life journey which have to give them opportunity to grow and improve, not just in a professional way but also to make them more valuable as human beings. If ones work is not satisfying enough, it can cause problems and make them unhappy and even depressed. Therefore, it is crucial to select a path which gives them all they need for a personal developement and meaningful life. My personal experience demonstrate this. I always dreamed about becoming and an astronomer and after years of hard work my dreams became true. I cannot describe how much it changed my life, and I cannot imagine to do anything else. It brings me joy and feeling of being needed. It is possible that if I had picked other career path, I would have had a different attitude towards this topic.
From a financial standpoint, it is important that your job is able to cover all essential needs and some more. Travelling, good food and cozy home are some of the aspects which make your life better and perfectly splendid. According to research, people with a stable income are in average more happy and more importantly they are less impacted by mental health issues. Hence, having a good job have a huge relevance. To illustrate, my current salary open more opportunities im my life such as visiting foreign countries, experiencing new cusine, and improving my selfcare.
In this essay, I discussed my personal beliefs that our work life is more influencial that your social life. I feel this way not just because it fulfil your intelectual needs but also because stabel income is necessary for life without worries.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 4, column 363, Rule ID: IN_A_X_MANNER[1]
Message: Consider replacing "in a professional way" with adverb for "professional"; eg, "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
...portunity to grow and improve, not just in a professional way but also to make them more valuable as ...
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Line 4, column 452, Rule ID: PROGRESSIVE_VERBS[1]
Message: This verb is normally not used in the progressive form. Try a simple form instead.
...valuable as human beings. If ones work is not satisfying enough, it can cause problems and make ...
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Line 4, column 867, Rule ID: ADMIT_ENJOY_VB[1]
Message: This verb is used with the gerund form: 'imagine doing'.
Suggestion: imagine doing
...w much it changed my life, and I cannot imagine to do anything else. It brings me joy and fee...
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Line 7, column 152, Rule ID: SOME_OF_THE[1]
Message: Simply use 'some'.
Suggestion: some
...Travelling, good food and cozy home are some of the aspects which make your life better and...
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Line 10, column 146, Rule ID: IT_VBZ[1]
Message: Did you mean 'fulfils'?
Suggestion: fulfils
...fe. I feel this way not just because it fulfil your intelectual needs but also because...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, hence, if, may, so, therefore, i feel, such as, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 15.1003584229 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 9.8082437276 92% => OK
Conjunction : 19.0 13.8261648746 137% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.0286738351 100% => OK
Pronoun: 61.0 43.0788530466 142% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 31.0 52.1666666667 59% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1852.0 1977.66487455 94% => OK
No of words: 385.0 407.700716846 94% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.81038961039 4.8611393121 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.4296068528 4.48103885553 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.66750085339 2.67179642975 100% => OK
Unique words: 214.0 212.727598566 101% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.555844155844 0.524837075471 106% => OK
syllable_count: 585.0 618.680645161 95% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 16.0 9.59856630824 167% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6003584229 92% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 48.0707580961 48.9658058833 98% => OK
Chars per sentence: 97.4736842105 100.406767564 97% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.2631578947 20.6045352989 98% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.10526315789 5.45110844103 75% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.5376344086 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.21999179585 0.236089414692 93% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0653942162387 0.076458572812 86% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0712526639274 0.0737576698707 97% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.150518231391 0.150856017488 100% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0390121258768 0.0645574589148 60% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.4 11.7677419355 97% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 58.1214874552 103% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.1575268817 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.62 10.9000537634 97% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.11 8.01818996416 101% => OK
difficult_words: 85.0 86.8835125448 98% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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