Do you agree or disagree with the following statement: Work has a bigger impact on your overall
happiness than your social life.
We spend most of our waking hours at work, and because of that, it is necessary that it fulfils our needs. Although some may argue that your social life has a more significant influence, I strongly agree with the statement. My view is based on professional and financial grounds, and in the subsequent paragraphs, I will support my major reasons with examples.
First of all, choosing your career for life is not a simple decision, and one has to pick their path so it can provide all the intellectual stimulation crucial for their development. Even though some may believe that work is just eight hours of boredom, others think about it as your life journey which has to give them an opportunity to grow and improve, not just in a professional way but also to make them more valuable as human beings. If one's work is not satisfying enough, it can cause problems and make one unhappy and even depressed. Therefore, it is crucial to select a path which gives them all they need for personal development and meaningful life. My personal experience demonstrates this concept. I have always dreamed about becoming an astronomer, and after years of hard work and dedication, my dreams became true, and I cannot even begin to describe how much it changed my life, and on top of that, I cannot imagine doing anything else. Moreover, it brings me joy and a feeling of being needed. It is possible that if I had picked another career path, I would have had a different attitude towards this topic.
From a financial standpoint, it is important that your job is able to cover all essential needs and some more. Travelling, good food and a cosy home are some of the aspects which make your life splendid. According to research, people with a stable income are, on average happier and, more importantly, they are less impacted by mental health issues. Furthermore, if one has to worry about money, one does not enjoy life to the full extent, and thus, having a good job has huge relevance. For instance, my current salary opened more opportunities in my life, such as visiting foreign countries, experiencing new cuisines, and improving my self-care. Without all of the possibilities which are associated with a higher income, I think my life would be less rewarding.
In this essay, I discussed my personal beliefs that our work life is more influential than our social life. I feel this way not just because it fulfils your intellectual needs but also because a stable income is necessary for life without worries.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 366, Rule ID: IN_A_X_MANNER[1]
Message: Consider replacing "in a professional way" with adverb for "professional"; eg, "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
...portunity to grow and improve, not just in a professional way but also to make them more valuable as ...
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Line 3, column 454, Rule ID: PROGRESSIVE_VERBS[1]
Message: This verb is normally not used in the progressive form. Try a simple form instead.
... valuable as human beings. If ones work is not satisfying enough, it can cause problems and make ...
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Line 6, column 154, Rule ID: SOME_OF_THE[1]
Message: Simply use 'some'.
Suggestion: some
...avelling, good food and a cosy home are some of the aspects which make your life splendid. ...
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Line 6, column 658, Rule ID: ALL_OF_THE[1]
Message: Simply use 'all the'.
Suggestion: all the
...es, and improving my self-care. Without all of the possibilities which are associated with...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, furthermore, if, may, moreover, so, therefore, thus, as to, for instance, i feel, i think, such as, first of all, on top of that
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 15.1003584229 113% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 9.8082437276 102% => OK
Conjunction : 20.0 13.8261648746 145% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.0286738351 109% => OK
Pronoun: 62.0 43.0788530466 144% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 38.0 52.1666666667 73% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.0752688172 111% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2084.0 1977.66487455 105% => OK
No of words: 434.0 407.700716846 106% => OK
Chars per words: 4.80184331797 4.8611393121 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.56428161445 4.48103885553 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.71962811303 2.67179642975 102% => OK
Unique words: 232.0 212.727598566 109% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.534562211982 0.524837075471 102% => OK
syllable_count: 655.2 618.680645161 106% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 20.0 9.59856630824 208% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 8.0 1.86738351254 428% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6003584229 92% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.1344086022 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 50.7201326492 48.9658058833 104% => OK
Chars per sentence: 109.684210526 100.406767564 109% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.8421052632 20.6045352989 111% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.68421052632 5.45110844103 141% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 11.8709677419 118% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.208402271757 0.236089414692 88% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0637791517149 0.076458572812 83% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0641067069953 0.0737576698707 87% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.144336935623 0.150856017488 96% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0324391533559 0.0645574589148 50% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.6 11.7677419355 107% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 57.61 58.1214874552 99% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 10.1575268817 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.86 10.9000537634 100% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.22 8.01818996416 103% => OK
difficult_words: 96.0 86.8835125448 110% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.0537634409 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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