Do you agree or disagree with the following statement: Work has a bigger impact on your overall
happiness than your social life.
We spend most of our waking hours at work, and because of that, it is necessary that it fulfils our needs. Although some may argue that your social life has a more significant influence, I strongly agree with the statement. My view is based on professional and financial grounds, and in the subsequent paragraphs, I will support my major reasons with examples.
First of all, choosing your career for life is not a simple decision, and one has to pick their path so it can provide all the intellectual stimulation crucial for their development. Even though some may believe that work is just eight hours of boredom, others think about it as their life journey which has to give them an opportunity to grow and improve, not just in a professional way but also to make them more valuable as human beings. If the work is not satisfying enough, it can cause problems and make a person unhappy and even depressed. Therefore, it is crucial to select a path which gives all what is needed for personal development and meaningful life. My personal experience demonstrates this concept. I have always dreamed about becoming an astronomer, and after years of hard work and dedication, my dreams became true, and I cannot even begin to describe how much it changed my life, and on top of that I cannot imagine doing anything else. Moreover, it brings me joy, a feeling of being needed. It is possible that if I had picked another career path, I would have had a different attitude towards this topic.
From a financial standpoint, it is important that your job is able to cover all essential needs and some more. Travelling, good food and a cosy home are some of the aspects which make life of an individual splendid. According to research, people with a stable income are, on average happier and, more importantly, less impacted by mental health issues. Furthermore, if an issue of unsufficient funds is alway on the table, it becames more complicated to enjoy life to the full extent, and, thus, having a good job have a huge relevance. For instance, my current salary opened more opportunities in my life, such as visiting foreign countries, experiencing new cuisines, and improving my self-care. In contrast, when I was growing up my family, unfortunately, did not have sufficient income and that caused a lot of stress. Without all of the possibilities which are associeted with a higher income, I think my life would be not as rewarding as it is.
In this essay, I discussed my personal beliefs that our work life is more influential than our social life. I feel this way not just because it fulfils your intellectual needs but also because a stable income is necessary for life without worries.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 4, column 367, Rule ID: IN_A_X_MANNER[1]
Message: Consider replacing "in a professional way" with adverb for "professional"; eg, "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
...portunity to grow and improve, not just in a professional way but also to make them more valuable as ...
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Line 4, column 454, Rule ID: PROGRESSIVE_VERBS[1]
Message: This verb is normally not used in the progressive form. Try a simple form instead.
...e valuable as human beings. If the work is not satisfying enough, it can cause problems and make ...
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Line 4, column 601, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... is crucial to select a path which gives all what is needed for personal developm...
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Line 7, column 154, Rule ID: SOME_OF_THE[1]
Message: Simply use 'some'.
Suggestion: some
...avelling, good food and a cosy home are some of the aspects which make life of an individua...
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Line 7, column 832, Rule ID: ALL_OF_THE[1]
Message: Simply use 'all the'.
Suggestion: all the
...nd that caused a lot of stress. Without all of the possibilities which are associeted with...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, furthermore, if, may, moreover, so, therefore, thus, as to, for instance, i feel, i think, in contrast, such as, first of all, on top of that
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 15.1003584229 132% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 9.8082437276 92% => OK
Conjunction : 19.0 13.8261648746 137% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 11.0286738351 127% => OK
Pronoun: 63.0 43.0788530466 146% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 43.0 52.1666666667 82% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.0752688172 111% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2241.0 1977.66487455 113% => OK
No of words: 467.0 407.700716846 115% => OK
Chars per words: 4.79871520343 4.8611393121 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.64867537961 4.48103885553 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.7934503184 2.67179642975 105% => OK
Unique words: 250.0 212.727598566 118% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.535331905782 0.524837075471 102% => OK
syllable_count: 707.4 618.680645161 114% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 19.0 9.59856630824 198% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 7.0 1.86738351254 375% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6003584229 97% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 20.1344086022 114% => OK
Sentence length SD: 50.2687527198 48.9658058833 103% => OK
Chars per sentence: 112.05 100.406767564 112% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.35 20.6045352989 113% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.95 5.45110844103 146% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.5376344086 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 11.8709677419 118% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.181058926985 0.236089414692 77% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0546186207513 0.076458572812 71% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0628655805991 0.0737576698707 85% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.131492173755 0.150856017488 87% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0443793485797 0.0645574589148 69% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.9 11.7677419355 110% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 56.59 58.1214874552 97% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 10.1575268817 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.86 10.9000537634 100% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.4 8.01818996416 105% => OK
difficult_words: 107.0 86.8835125448 123% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.0537634409 111% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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