Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Workers would be much better if they are doing different types of tasks at the same time than doing the same task.
Under the amelioration of people's living standards, the flourishing industries have made workers' working tempo quicken. Considering such a situation, in order to improve working efficiency of workers, there is a statement be discussed that employers should do the different types of tasks at the same time. On the one hand, some people agree with this since they think it is helpful to to keep workers' minds refreshed. However, a considerate number of people on the opposite, which workers should do the same task. I do agree this statement. Comparing with the multitasking, doing the one task at sametime could be more positive to workers' efficiency.
Firstly, the ability of concentrating oneself is the most vital quality to a worker. Without a focused attention, the task would be easily interupted by many distractions in the real working process, which may lead some serious mistakes. For example, last summer, I was required to give a presentation. while I was preparing it, I also tried multitask to fo some homework. I had thought I could balance the time well and I did the two things at the same time. However, I not only failed to prepare my presentation well, but also I did nothing on my homework. In this way, concentrating is necessary during working.
Secondly, It's self-evident that staying focused could help people improve there productivity a lot, which means the economic profits of employees could rise. The more efficient workers doing tasks, the more time was saved and more money was earned. As far as this point, the study from the Faculty of Management and Human Resources at University of Amsterdam showed that, for the workers at on industry, the level of their concentration is linearly related to the the its productivity. On the other hand, the multitasking will exert a negative effect on the work. As a result, multitasking could do nothing benificial to workers' efficiency.
To sum up, doing one task not only helps workers staying staying focus, but also improve their efficiency which also contributes to the economic benefits. So, there is no doubt that doing one task at the same time is better than doing more works at one time.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, however, if, may, second, secondly, so, well, while, for example, no doubt, as a result, to sum up, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 15.1003584229 93% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 9.8082437276 102% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 13.8261648746 36% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.0286738351 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 27.0 43.0788530466 63% => OK
Preposition: 48.0 52.1666666667 92% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.0752688172 124% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1817.0 1977.66487455 92% => OK
No of words: 364.0 407.700716846 89% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.99175824176 4.8611393121 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.36792674256 4.48103885553 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.85655504308 2.67179642975 107% => OK
Unique words: 192.0 212.727598566 90% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.527472527473 0.524837075471 101% => OK
syllable_count: 569.7 618.680645161 92% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 9.59856630824 63% => OK
Article: 9.0 3.08781362007 291% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.94265232975 162% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6003584229 97% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 47.7998692467 48.9658058833 98% => OK
Chars per sentence: 90.85 100.406767564 90% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.2 20.6045352989 88% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.2 5.45110844103 132% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.5376344086 108% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.398649883814 0.236089414692 169% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.119840872923 0.076458572812 157% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.126537172972 0.0737576698707 172% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.251956681262 0.150856017488 167% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.146717016581 0.0645574589148 227% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.2 11.7677419355 95% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 53.21 58.1214874552 92% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 10.1575268817 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.66 10.9000537634 107% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.26 8.01818996416 103% => OK
difficult_words: 86.0 86.8835125448 99% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 75.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.5 Out of 30
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