Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
At universities and colleges, sports and social activities are just as important as classes and libraries and should receive equal financial support.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Attending university is an integral stage of everybody's life. However, its main purpose differs significantly from one society to another. Some countries view the purpose of education as a way of giving students a firm academic background, while others regard the primary purpose of education as giving students the chance to develop their social behavior and emotional characteristic along with academic education. In my view, extra curriculum activities in universities should get funded equally as classes and libraries. In what follows, I would explain my perspective.
First, it is clear that the main purpose of education is to prepare students for their future life. It is true that learning science and math would benefit students substantially. For instance, they can find a good job or discover a new thing in their field of study, which is very rewarding. However, academic knowledge is not enough to will be successful in life. Researches found that students who develop social behavior and physical health along with education are more successful in their life. In comparison, other students who their universities only provide education rarely can lead to a good life. Suppose, a graduate student, who during the education time only had concentrated on academic knowledge, wants to get a job. While he has a proper academic background, he does not have a professional network to help him find a job. When he is invited for the interview, he can answer technical questions properly while he can not make a good eye contact with the interviewee, which makes a bad impression.
Second, it has been proven that studying without fun would have poor results. If students only study without a refreshing break, he would get bored soon. According to a famous study, if students get a break every one hour and a half their productivity would improve substantially. So if universities take social activities and sports as important as classes and libraries, students can do many fun activities during their break, which would result in higher performance.
In sum, universities should provide extra curriculum activities for students to prepare
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Don't say 'equally as'. You can use either 'equally' or 'as' on its own. When comparing two nouns, use 'just as'.
Suggestion: equally; as; just as
...ities in universities should get funded equally as classes and libraries. In what follows,...
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Line 3, column 713, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... had concentrated on academic knowledge, wants to get a job. While he has a prope...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, however, if, second, so, while, for instance, in my view, it is true
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 15.1003584229 66% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 9.8082437276 143% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 13.8261648746 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.0286738351 100% => OK
Pronoun: 26.0 43.0788530466 60% => OK
Preposition: 33.0 52.1666666667 63% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.0752688172 124% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1813.0 1977.66487455 92% => OK
No of words: 345.0 407.700716846 85% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.25507246377 4.8611393121 108% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.3097767484 4.48103885553 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.96807065183 2.67179642975 111% => OK
Unique words: 181.0 212.727598566 85% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.524637681159 0.524837075471 100% => OK
syllable_count: 570.6 618.680645161 92% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.51630824373 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6003584229 92% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 52.0758556036 48.9658058833 106% => OK
Chars per sentence: 95.4210526316 100.406767564 95% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.1578947368 20.6045352989 88% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.94736842105 5.45110844103 72% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0904016461292 0.236089414692 38% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0323678517886 0.076458572812 42% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0524223842122 0.0737576698707 71% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0746358075737 0.150856017488 49% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0303637805108 0.0645574589148 47% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.4 11.7677419355 105% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 44.75 58.1214874552 77% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 10.1575268817 113% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.93 10.9000537634 119% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.05 8.01818996416 100% => OK
difficult_words: 77.0 86.8835125448 89% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.002688172 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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