Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
At universities and colleges, sports and social activities are just as important as classes and libraries and should receive equal financial support.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
By and large, it is established beyond doubt that education play a significant role in everybody’s life. There has been no shortage of debates among universities that whether it is beneficial to take social activities and sports facilities as important as classes and libraries or not. Meanwhile, there is a tendency toward the notion that students attend to universities to study and if university allocate equal budget to other non-academic activities, the quality of classes will decrease, which is not beneficial for students. As for this writer’s opinion, I will subscribe for the former idea. In what follows, I would delve into paramount reasons to substantiate my viewpoint.
The first compelling reason corroborating my stance on this subject is that one of the most prominent purposes of education is to prepare students for their future lives. It is crystal clear that if an individual learns essential skills and knowledge in the young age at school, he will know how to overcome future problematic situations in the real life. Moreover, he can use his learnings to find a good job, run a loving family and contribute positively to his society. While It is true that learning science and math would benefit students substantially, it is not enough; and there are other skills which is necessary. By way of illustration, after graduation, I was seeking for a decent job in my field of study, but I could not find any. “you cannot find a job because you cannot make a good eye contact with others and also your way of speaking is no persuasive enough” one of my interviewees said. Had my university devoted more budget and attention to social activities along with academic education for students, I would have learned more social skills and would have had a multi-dimensional personality. Thus, I could have found job more quickly. This example manifests why universities should take extra curriculum activities as important as libraries and classes.
Furthermore, it has been proven that studying without fun would have poor result. It is axiomatic that If a student only study without any refreshing break, he will get bored soon. When people are bored, they do not have enough motivation to move on toward their goals. Hens, if the university do not allocate sufficient budget to extra-curricular activities, they cannot offer high-quality programs to the students. Vividly, poor quality programs would not attract students to participate, and as a result, they have to study all the time, which is boring. As a case in point, when I was 18, my university used to pay attention to libraries and providing high-end equipment for classes. However, a large number of students had poor results. After two years, the new dean of the university, which had a completely different viewpoint form the former one, decided to allocate more budget to the gym and other extra-curricular activities. After that students were willing to participate in those high-quality programs, which led them to be more energetic during the semester. As a result, the average scores of students increased conspicuously. This example reveals the importance of paying attention and enough budget to social activities at universities.
By perusing paragraphs above, one can infer that it is highly crucial for universities to take social activities as seriously as academic subjects. For the sake of brevity, a couple of points worth reiterating. First, students should learn and practice social behavior skills at university to become ready for their future lives. Second, they should have fun along with their studies in order to stay motivated and productive. As for this writer advice, I vehemently urge that universities devote enough time, money and consideration for extra-curriculum programs; in order to grow mature and successful individuals for the society.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 698, Rule ID: LARGE_NUMBER_OF[1]
Message: Specify a number, remove phrase, or simply use 'many' or 'numerous'
Suggestion: many; numerous
...igh-end equipment for classes. However, a large number of students had poor results. After two ye...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, furthermore, however, if, moreover, second, so, thus, while, as for, as a result, by and large, it is true
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 22.0 15.1003584229 146% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 20.0 9.8082437276 204% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 22.0 13.8261648746 159% => OK
Relative clauses : 18.0 11.0286738351 163% => OK
Pronoun: 56.0 43.0788530466 130% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 72.0 52.1666666667 138% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 8.0752688172 161% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 3261.0 1977.66487455 165% => OK
No of words: 622.0 407.700716846 153% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.24276527331 4.8611393121 108% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.99398916966 4.48103885553 111% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.0956937103 2.67179642975 116% => OK
Unique words: 309.0 212.727598566 145% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.496784565916 0.524837075471 95% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 1039.5 618.680645161 168% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.51630824373 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 22.0 9.59856630824 229% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 6.0 3.08781362007 194% => OK
Subordination: 11.0 3.51792114695 313% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.94265232975 162% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 30.0 20.6003584229 146% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 49.6323035488 48.9658058833 101% => OK
Chars per sentence: 108.7 100.406767564 108% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.7333333333 20.6045352989 101% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.13333333333 5.45110844103 76% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 11.8709677419 118% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 10.0 3.85842293907 259% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.14791376419 0.236089414692 63% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0400816513267 0.076458572812 52% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0535105056238 0.0737576698707 73% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0994411532394 0.150856017488 66% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0258233900904 0.0645574589148 40% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.6 11.7677419355 116% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 42.72 58.1214874552 74% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 6.10430107527 183% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 10.1575268817 121% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.11 10.9000537634 120% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.51 8.01818996416 106% => OK
difficult_words: 153.0 86.8835125448 176% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.0 10.002688172 130% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.247311828 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Write the essay in 30 minutes.
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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