Do you agree or disagree with following statement?
At universities and college, sports and social activities are just as important as classes and libraries, and should receive equal financial support.
These days the most companies are looking for individuals who has an ability of specific skills including not only professional but also social activity, team working, self-improving and other sport skills. During the study year, most students concerned only on their academic subject. However, in my opinion, they should spend equal time on improving their physical body and social life. Nevertheless, some students spend less time on such activity due to less social activity occurred on campus or university which is limited due to receives less financial support. For this reason, I agree with the statement that sport and social activity should receive same financial support as classes and libraries. I have two statement why I think it is important and why it should receive same financial support.
First of all, social activities improve individual self-improving, communicating and team working skills. Moreover, by attending more social activity, students will learn from their peers a lot of life soft skills. When I was in freshman, I was a shy student why spend less time on social activity. A year later, I entered in student union of my university which enables me to communicate many different people who teaches me plenty of soft skills that is beneficial for my future career and social life. Hence, I would like to say that, if there are more social activity, more students will attend. As result, their soft skills will improve just like I improved mine.
Secondly, for our lifetime, our physical health is first-rate value. At university, students spend plenty of time behind the desk which lead them fragile physical health condition. I think by proving more sports for students, they will spend qualified hours on gym. As I observed, the most universities offered limited sport activities such as basketball and volleyball but, there are other activities like ping-pong, air tennis, billiard, darts, football et cetera. This might be the reason why some students spend less time on sports. Therefore, university should plan more budget to increase sport type that some students love to play.
In conclusion, In my own opinion, I would suggest university to spend equal financial support for sports and activities. By providing enough budget on such things, students will graduate from the university not only great academic knowledge but also great communicating skills and better physical health.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 128, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...c skills including not only professional but also social activity, team working, ...
^^
Line 2, column 389, Rule ID: NUMEROUS_DIFFERENT[1]
Message: Use simply 'many'.
Suggestion: many
...versity which enables me to communicate many different people who teaches me plenty of soft sk...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 225, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ink by proving more sports for students, they will spend qualified hours on gym. ...
^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, hence, however, if, look, moreover, nevertheless, second, secondly, so, therefore, i think, in conclusion, such as, first of all, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 15.1003584229 66% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 9.8082437276 122% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 13.8261648746 101% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.0286738351 91% => OK
Pronoun: 36.0 43.0788530466 84% => OK
Preposition: 38.0 52.1666666667 73% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.0752688172 37% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2038.0 1977.66487455 103% => OK
No of words: 387.0 407.700716846 95% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.2661498708 4.8611393121 108% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.43534841618 4.48103885553 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.72735560112 2.67179642975 102% => OK
Unique words: 199.0 212.727598566 94% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.514211886305 0.524837075471 98% => OK
syllable_count: 626.4 618.680645161 101% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 13.0 9.59856630824 135% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6003584229 97% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 46.6438366775 48.9658058833 95% => OK
Chars per sentence: 101.9 100.406767564 101% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.35 20.6045352989 94% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.05 5.45110844103 148% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.251403764655 0.236089414692 106% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0827559751895 0.076458572812 108% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.107027571901 0.0737576698707 145% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.15702414099 0.150856017488 104% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.107667255275 0.0645574589148 167% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.1 11.7677419355 111% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 52.19 58.1214874552 90% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 10.1575268817 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.29 10.9000537634 122% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.97 8.01818996416 99% => OK
difficult_words: 83.0 86.8835125448 96% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 10.002688172 120% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
---------------------
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 66.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 20.0 Out of 30
---------------------
Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.