With no doubt, parents agree with the statement that education is crucial and essential to children. According to a survey, great educated children are prone to be successful. However, it is where the agreement stops. When it comes to the problem that the high technological invention such as cell phone is benefitial or harmful to a child, parents holds different aspets. In my opinion, I believe by using those technique carefully, children take more merits than disadvantages from them. The reasons why I think so are illustrated in the following passage.
To begin with, a well-round education does not only about academic development, but also the mental development and social skills. Unlike the ancient day, children learned to communicate and express their own ideas face by face. On the other hand, nowadays children can learn the social skills via social networking web site such as Facebook. It is an undeniable breakthrought especially for those children who are too shy to talk with others. For example, my sister who always gets nervous everytime she stands on the stage. In the past, she would never got a chance to show her talent on telling stories to others. However, because of the invention of Facebook, she is able to broadcast and tell stories to other kids live time on the Internet without facing to lots of audience. Everytime she tells stories I can see the happiness and confidence on her.
Secondly, despite the fact that playing online game for a long period hurts children's physical health, it is a cleaver way to teach children to be responsible for their behaviors. Take my brother for example, he made an agreement with my parenets that he had to finish homework before playing online games and the maximum time he could play is one hour a day when he was in high school. Since he was really obsessed with online games, he made an effort on studying after school. In the end, he graduated with the first prize. So, according to my brother's exmaple, are you still saying online games is alwasys harmful to a children?
In sum, while those invention may have some bad influence on children, parents can skip the bad effects easily by teaching their children how to use those techniques wisely.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 408, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'this technique' or 'those techniques'?
Suggestion: this technique; those techniques
...pets. In my opinion, I believe by using those technique carefully, children take more merits th...
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Line 2, column 316, Rule ID: WEB_SITE[1]
Message: Did you mean 'website'?
Suggestion: website
...the social skills via social networking web site such as Facebook. It is an undeniable b...
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Line 2, column 764, Rule ID: LOTS_OF_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun audience seems to be countable; consider using: 'lots of audiences'.
Suggestion: lots of audiences
... time on the Internet without facing to lots of audience. Everytime she tells stories I can see ...
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Line 3, column 71, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[2]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'hurt'?
Suggestion: hurt
...t playing online game for a long period hurts childrens physical health, it is a clea...
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Line 3, column 620, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[1]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'a child' or simply 'children'?
Suggestion: a child; children
...ying online games is alwasys harmful to a children? In sum, while those invention may hav...
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Line 4, column 15, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'this invention' or 'those inventions'?
Suggestion: this invention; those inventions
...s harmful to a children? In sum, while those invention may have some bad influence on children...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, may, really, second, secondly, so, still, well, while, for example, i think, no doubt, such as, in my opinion, to begin with, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 15.1003584229 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 9.8082437276 61% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 13.8261648746 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.0286738351 82% => OK
Pronoun: 38.0 43.0788530466 88% => OK
Preposition: 54.0 52.1666666667 104% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 8.0752688172 161% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1851.0 1977.66487455 94% => OK
No of words: 379.0 407.700716846 93% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.88390501319 4.8611393121 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.41224685777 4.48103885553 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.6356924137 2.67179642975 99% => OK
Unique words: 226.0 212.727598566 106% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.596306068602 0.524837075471 114% => OK
syllable_count: 574.2 618.680645161 93% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.59856630824 104% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 12.0 4.94265232975 243% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6003584229 97% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 43.8473488366 48.9658058833 90% => OK
Chars per sentence: 92.55 100.406767564 92% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.95 20.6045352989 92% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.7 5.45110844103 160% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.5376344086 108% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 11.8709677419 67% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.85842293907 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.219515777411 0.236089414692 93% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0610013175249 0.076458572812 80% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.046970019036 0.0737576698707 64% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.114416038374 0.150856017488 76% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0580027236607 0.0645574589148 90% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.0 11.7677419355 93% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 61.67 58.1214874552 106% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 10.1575268817 90% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.02 10.9000537634 101% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.11 8.01818996416 101% => OK
difficult_words: 86.0 86.8835125448 99% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 10.002688172 75% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 80.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 24.0 Out of 30
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