Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
Educating children is a more difficult task today than it was in the past because they spend so much time on cell phone, online games, and social networking Website.
Education has a tremendous impact on our lives and well-being. It enhances our success in an endless way because it encompasses our core. Therefore, I adamantly disagree that the education children is a more difficult task today than it was because they spend so much time on the cell phone, online games, and social networking website. However, the invention of the sophisticated technology affected both youth's knowledge and achievement.
First of all, technical innovation has a profound implication on young people education. In fact, flourishing technology broaden their horizon. Nowadays, it became easier for the students to improve their knowledge acquisition. For instance, if the professor gave their students an assignment, they can use this innovation to search for the information that they need. The students can by one click on the google gain an ideal information within a second. Moreover, technical development helps to save time for the students; they do not need to spend ample of time by searching in the traditional books and documents, they can within a few time earn a valuable topic by utilizing the internet using their phone. Hence, the invention of technology is the foundation of the prosperity of the students.
Second, thriving technology has a crucial influence on students performance. Indeed, it boosts their studying-related duties and encourages them to achieve more than one gaols at the same time. For instance, I have a son; he is fourteen years old, he took an online course to accomplish his homework regarding the class, and he can work in the same time in a market to improve his interpersonal skills. So it becomes convenient for the young people to do two tasks at the same time. Besides, this innovation can be entertaining for the children; they can using then in their leisure time to help them to destress because of by playing games they can feel a great deal of comfort. Therefore, the availability of the technology has a remarkable role in children life.
For the reasons mentioned above, from my perspective, sophisticated technology has a vital impact on the young people. Not only it progresses their knowledge, but also it boosts their achievement. Hopefully, all people appreciate these spectacular innovations.
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Essay evaluation report
Sentence: Besides, this innovation can be entertaining for the children; they can using then in their leisure time to help them to destress because of by playing games they can feel a great deal of comfort.
Error: destress Suggestion: distress
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flaws:
the essay is not exactly right on the topic. this essay is not about the advantages of technologies for learning, but whether 'educating children is a more difficult task today than it was in the past ' or not. If you disagree, the reasons should be something like this:
1. Teachers and parents could take advantage of these three things to get close to the children and be their friends so that in fact it is easier to educate them with various channels.
2. For parents particularly, they could make it a bonus for children to use the cell phones, play games and chat on the social networking Web site when they do some housework, complete their homework or get high scores in a test. In this way, children may get a positive stimulus to do right things and parents educate them during the process.
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if you agree, the reasons would be those:
1. Children are easily misguided by the unhealthy information on the Internet and once they have absorbed it into their own values, it would be hard to educate them and change their mind.
2. Children are busy with the cell phone, online games and social networking website that they tend to spare no patience and attention to listen to their teachers or parents for any instruction.
3. People with whom children met, chatted and played via these three channels exerted great influences on them, which could be negative. However, as children spent so much time with these people and trusted them, they might resist the advices given by their teachers and parents.
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: ? in 30
Category: Poor Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 1 2
No. of Sentences: 20 15
No. of Words: 367 350
No. of Characters: 1855 1500
No. of Different Words: 192 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.377 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.054 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.966 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 130 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 106 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 86 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 63 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 18.35 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 10.537 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.7 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.295 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.358 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.094 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 2 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 88, Rule ID: IN_A_X_MANNER[1]
Message: Consider replacing "in an endless way" with adverb for "endless"; eg, "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
...and well-being. It enhances our success in an endless way because it encompasses our core. Theref...
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Line 1, column 407, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'youths'' or 'youth's'?
Suggestion: youths'; youth's
... sophisticated technology affected both youths knowledge and achievement. First of ...
^^^^^^
Line 3, column 637, Rule ID: MANY_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun time seems to be countable; consider using: 'few times'.
Suggestion: few times
... books and documents, they can within a few time earn a valuable topic by utilizing the ...
^^^^^^^^
Line 4, column 56, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[2]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'students'' or 'student's'?
Suggestion: students'; student's
...g technology has a crucial influence on students performance. Indeed, it boosts their st...
^^^^^^^^
Line 4, column 555, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[1]
Message: The verb 'can' requires the base form of the verb: 'use'
Suggestion: use
...entertaining for the children; they can using then in their leisure time to help them...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, but, first, hence, however, if, moreover, regarding, second, so, then, therefore, well, for instance, in fact, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 6.0 15.1003584229 40% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 9.8082437276 92% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 13.8261648746 51% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 2.0 11.0286738351 18% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 41.0 43.0788530466 95% => OK
Preposition: 43.0 52.1666666667 82% => OK
Nominalization: 21.0 8.0752688172 260% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1908.0 1977.66487455 96% => OK
No of words: 367.0 407.700716846 90% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.19891008174 4.8611393121 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.37689890912 4.48103885553 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.06580318204 2.67179642975 115% => OK
Unique words: 196.0 212.727598566 92% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.534059945504 0.524837075471 102% => OK
syllable_count: 596.7 618.680645161 96% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 9.59856630824 125% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.94265232975 40% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6003584229 97% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 55.5952111247 48.9658058833 114% => OK
Chars per sentence: 95.4 100.406767564 95% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.35 20.6045352989 89% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.9 5.45110844103 127% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.5376344086 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 11.8709677419 118% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.240772242674 0.236089414692 102% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0662602543417 0.076458572812 87% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.156117645465 0.0737576698707 212% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.157990832002 0.150856017488 105% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.158315723132 0.0645574589148 245% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.2 11.7677419355 104% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 53.21 58.1214874552 92% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 10.1575268817 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.88 10.9000537634 118% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.66 8.01818996416 108% => OK
difficult_words: 96.0 86.8835125448 110% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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