Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
Famous entertainers and athletes deserve to have more privacy than they have now.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
It goes without saying that since the dawn of civilization, privacy has played a prevailing role in every individual's life. It is widely accepted that all of the people must have privacy in their lifes, specially famous ones such as athletes and entetainers. Therefore, a plethora of people are the leading proponents of the claim that little do people interfrence in people's life wheras others hold the exact opposite perspective and believe that privacy isn't a very important. I prsonally contend that no one doesn't permit to interfere in human's privacy. To substantuate my point of view, the following paragraphs will elucidate this topic at outstanding reasons.
The first exquisite point to be mentioned is that interfrence in other life isn't a ethic work in any society. The human being, from the first era, invariably hate the ugly behaviars which are not appropriate for himself, so that he is evoiding these works and are absorbed to the ethic behaviars. Do u like a person goes to your pravacy life? No. Besides, it is not logical that a person enter your life because only you are a famous person in your fields.
Furtheremore, it is established beyound doubt that the famous people need to interaction with their families, their friends. Unfortuantely, meddle is a mojor role for some problems in athletes' life. Rarely have they time for doing private works with their families such as going abroad, playing ecercise with their offspringes. For examples, the most famous person in footbal in my country, last year conflicted with some people entering to his privacy life. This ugly behavier lead to court and judgment.
To recapitulated, all the enumerated reasons converge to the point that privacy should aim for every ones nowdays. However, that was a story in nutshell; actually, there are some other reasons and examples, challenging the claim, which are not mentioned above.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, besides, first, however, if, so, therefore, for example, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 15.1003584229 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 9.8082437276 41% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 13.8261648746 36% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.0286738351 118% => OK
Pronoun: 34.0 43.0788530466 79% => OK
Preposition: 37.0 52.1666666667 71% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1590.0 1977.66487455 80% => OK
No of words: 312.0 407.700716846 77% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.09615384615 4.8611393121 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.20279927342 4.48103885553 94% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.75783356217 2.67179642975 103% => OK
Unique words: 179.0 212.727598566 84% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.573717948718 0.524837075471 109% => OK
syllable_count: 501.3 618.680645161 81% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Article: 5.0 3.08781362007 162% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 20.6003584229 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 43.6919257415 48.9658058833 89% => OK
Chars per sentence: 99.375 100.406767564 99% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.5 20.6045352989 95% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.625 5.45110844103 85% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 11.0 5.5376344086 199% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 11.8709677419 59% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.85842293907 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.162739696458 0.236089414692 69% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0505218130659 0.076458572812 66% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0459048735974 0.0737576698707 62% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0917229140759 0.150856017488 61% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0301424962965 0.0645574589148 47% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.3 11.7677419355 105% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 52.19 58.1214874552 90% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 10.1575268817 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.3 10.9000537634 113% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.78 8.01818996416 110% => OK
difficult_words: 83.0 86.8835125448 96% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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