Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
In the past it was easier to identify what type of career or job would lead to a secure, successful future.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
The job has a tremendous impact on our lives and well-being. It enhances our success endlessly because it encompasses our core. Therefore, I adamantly disagree that in the past it was easier to identify what type of career or job would lead to secure, successful future because the invention of technology and improvement of education nowadays affected positively on our function.
First of all, flourishing technology has a profound effect on our occupation. In fact, the invention of sophisticated technology provided an easy path to find a secure job. For instance, nowadays, it became suitable to get job by filling up an application online. Technically advanced help the people to improve their horizon; they can search by google and find many different opportunities. However, in the past, the young people were blindly following their parents in their job they didn't have any chances to evolve themselves because they had to follow the instructions of their parents. Moreover, the life was simple and primitive in the past and the people mind was easy, so they were accepting to execute any job to gain money. Hence, sophisticated technology is the foundation to ensure a prosperous job than before.
Second, the development of education in the school play a vital role to get a career. Indeed, the high quality of education programs which available today helps the students to be goal-oriented in choosing their future career. For example, in the first year of the universities, all the students take different general topics such as chemistry, physics, biology, and others which provides a fresh perspective for the students to take a sample from each field that helps them in the future to decide which job will be more successful for them. Besides, these advanced academic programs push the young people to save time. If the student find himself in a specific scope, he can effectively apply to this scope when he graduates without wasting his time. In contrast, in the past, the education programs were simple, and the students could not get enough point of view to get a secure job in the future. Therefore, it becomes comfortable than before to decide which function is ideal for you.
For the reasons mentioned above, from my perspective, the technical innovation and improvement of education have a crucial influence to get a secure job rather than before. Hopefully, all people appreciate these spectacular innovations and programs and utilize them to flourish the populace.
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Essay evaluation report
the development of education in the school play a vital role
the development of education in the school plays a vital role
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 24 in 30
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 1 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 19 15
No. of Words: 408 350
No. of Characters: 2035 1500
No. of Different Words: 209 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.494 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.988 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.803 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 155 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 114 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 87 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 57 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 21.474 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 11.123 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.684 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.304 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.483 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.112 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 4 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 363, Rule ID: NUMEROUS_DIFFERENT[1]
Message: Use simply 'many'.
Suggestion: many
...zon; they can search by google and find many different opportunities. However, in the past, th...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 487, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: didn't
...llowing their parents in their job they didnt have any chances to evolve themselves b...
^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
besides, first, hence, however, if, moreover, second, so, therefore, well, for example, for instance, in contrast, in fact, such as, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 15.1003584229 73% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 9.8082437276 51% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 13.8261648746 80% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.0286738351 63% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 35.0 43.0788530466 81% => OK
Preposition: 61.0 52.1666666667 117% => OK
Nominalization: 18.0 8.0752688172 223% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2094.0 1977.66487455 106% => OK
No of words: 407.0 407.700716846 100% => OK
Chars per words: 5.14496314496 4.8611393121 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.49157444576 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.88159988389 2.67179642975 108% => OK
Unique words: 218.0 212.727598566 102% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.535626535627 0.524837075471 102% => OK
syllable_count: 667.8 618.680645161 108% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.59856630824 73% => OK
Article: 8.0 3.08781362007 259% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6003584229 92% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 64.6187197905 48.9658058833 132% => OK
Chars per sentence: 110.210526316 100.406767564 110% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.4210526316 20.6045352989 104% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.63157894737 5.45110844103 140% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 11.8709677419 126% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.173231948831 0.236089414692 73% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0480525522065 0.076458572812 63% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.070457065317 0.0737576698707 96% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.107263433819 0.150856017488 71% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.077804268604 0.0645574589148 121% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.5 11.7677419355 115% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 50.16 58.1214874552 86% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 10.1575268817 113% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.53 10.9000537634 115% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.98 8.01818996416 112% => OK
difficult_words: 111.0 86.8835125448 128% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 10.002688172 90% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 80.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 24.0 Out of 30
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