Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?It is important to know about events happening around the world, even if it is unlikely that they will affect your daily life.Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
In At the stupendous age in which we live, the mass media widely disseminates information. Therefore, people access information from all over the world in a twinkling of an eye. Some people believe that it is beneficial for us to always know what is happening in the other side of the world even if it seems irrelevant to us. Others contend that it is a wolf in sheep’s dress. Ostensibly, it may not exert pernicious influences over our lives; however, scrutinizing the situation thoroughly reveals that it leads to loss of time, energy and concentration.
The majority of people spend a copious amount of time watching television so as to get some useless information. After being mesmerized by TV, they don't comprehend the passage of time. However, instead of vegetating in front of TV, they can devote time to reading books, which is useful for their jobs or they can participate in sports. According to cutting-edge research conducted in Asian countries, on average, people spend 5 hours a day to watching TV or reading newspapers. However, they devote only 30 minutes a day to take part in sports. Hence, it is no exaggeration to say that people kill their time.
Spending so much time at the irrelevant issues causes stress and lack of concentration. Some students instead of dedicating themselves to their schools’ assignments, all day along catch up on up-to-date news. Nevertheless, in order to be immersed in studying, they should eschew wasting energy on them. The crux of the problem is that they always engrossed in these issues so much so that they can't concentrate while they are studying. They began to think about the news which they have read recently. Consequently, not only do they feel overwhelmed and frustrated, but also they are not able to learn the course material.
By taking all this into consideration, I opine that people would not waste their time to acquire knowledge about the events which is irrelevant to them. Instead, they can read book or participate in sports.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, hence, however, if, may, nevertheless, so, therefore, while, as to
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 15.1003584229 73% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 9.8082437276 61% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 13.8261648746 51% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.0286738351 100% => OK
Pronoun: 40.0 43.0788530466 93% => OK
Preposition: 56.0 52.1666666667 107% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.0752688172 99% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1679.0 1977.66487455 85% => OK
No of words: 338.0 407.700716846 83% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.9674556213 4.8611393121 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.28774723029 4.48103885553 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.9581375409 2.67179642975 111% => OK
Unique words: 192.0 212.727598566 90% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.568047337278 0.524837075471 108% => OK
syllable_count: 514.8 618.680645161 83% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6003584229 92% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.1344086022 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 37.2264910292 48.9658058833 76% => OK
Chars per sentence: 88.3684210526 100.406767564 88% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.7894736842 20.6045352989 86% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.78947368421 5.45110844103 88% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 11.8709677419 42% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.85842293907 181% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.88709677419 143% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.101821715796 0.236089414692 43% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0323358977239 0.076458572812 42% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.038373300049 0.0737576698707 52% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0643801007783 0.150856017488 43% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0209320898264 0.0645574589148 32% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.9 11.7677419355 93% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 62.68 58.1214874552 108% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 10.1575268817 86% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.25 10.9000537634 103% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.17 8.01818996416 102% => OK
difficult_words: 79.0 86.8835125448 91% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 10.002688172 90% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.0537634409 88% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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