Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?It is important to know about events happening around the world, even if it is unlikely that they will affect your daily life.Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer
Knowledge has a tremendous impact on our lives and well-being. It enhances our success in immeasurable way because of it encompasses our core. Therefore, I adamantly agree that it is important to know about events happening around the world even though they will affect your daily life because of knowing universe event effect positively on both people knowledge and horizon.
First of all, being educated with events related to other country has a profound influence on your knowledge. In fact, more events help you to be a multi-cultural person. For example, my father all the time hear the news, he spent ample time listening and watching news regarding what happening around the world. One time we went tripe together to Australia, I realized that he knew everything about that country, he knows their traditional restaurant and their interest, I enjoyed in this trip because I could spend a wonderful time exploring the new state by the benefit from my father experience that he got it from the news. Hence, having information regarding the universe is the foundation to be an intellectual person.
Second, be interested to know the event of the world has a positive implication on your personality. Indeed, having different information related to different country broaden your horizon. For instance, the person who has much valuable information around the world has a lot of opportunities to be successful in the community; he could be a vital factor in discussion regarding the news and what happens around the world. Moreover, this thing gives the person a good reputation for his education which in turn enhance the people appreciation for him. As you can see, being interested in the wold's event boost your personality.
For the reasons mentioned above, from my perspective, even though the people might not have enough time to know the events around the world, but it is highly beneficial for them to know that. Not only to be an intelligent person but also to expand their horizon. Hopefully, all people follow this strategy.
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because of it encompasses our core.
because it encompasses our core.
people knowledge and horizon.
people's knowledge and horizon.
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flaws:
it is not exactly right on the topic. pay attention to this:
'...even if it is unlikely that they will affect your daily life', not 'they will affect your daily life'
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 16 in 30
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 2 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 16 15
No. of Words: 337 350
No. of Characters: 1665 1500
No. of Different Words: 177 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.285 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.941 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.752 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 119 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 84 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 64 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 50 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 21.062 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 13.141 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.625 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.324 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.512 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.142 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 4 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 592, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'wolds'' or 'wold's'?
Suggestion: wolds'; wold's
...As you can see, being interested in the wolds event boost your personality. For th...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, hence, if, moreover, regarding, second, so, therefore, well, for example, for instance, in fact, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 15.1003584229 79% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 9.8082437276 51% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 13.8261648746 51% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.0286738351 63% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 43.0 43.0788530466 100% => OK
Preposition: 45.0 52.1666666667 86% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 8.0752688172 149% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1711.0 1977.66487455 87% => OK
No of words: 337.0 407.700716846 83% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.07715133531 4.8611393121 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.28457229495 4.48103885553 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.83231584562 2.67179642975 106% => OK
Unique words: 181.0 212.727598566 85% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.537091988131 0.524837075471 102% => OK
syllable_count: 533.7 618.680645161 86% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.94265232975 40% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 20.6003584229 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 74.7157111992 48.9658058833 153% => OK
Chars per sentence: 106.9375 100.406767564 107% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.0625 20.6045352989 102% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.9375 5.45110844103 146% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.85842293907 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.249505209968 0.236089414692 106% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0813621535577 0.076458572812 106% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.101987464221 0.0737576698707 138% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.163479325564 0.150856017488 108% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0711928175759 0.0645574589148 110% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.0 11.7677419355 110% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 50.16 58.1214874552 86% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 10.1575268817 113% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.18 10.9000537634 112% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.19 8.01818996416 102% => OK
difficult_words: 75.0 86.8835125448 86% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.002688172 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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