Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
It is more important to keep your old friends than it is to make new friends. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
It is clear everyone needs to have some close friends. With friends we can have fun and good time and learn a lot of things. Some people believe that it is better to keep old friends, others, on the other hand, disagree and believe that it is better to make new friends. I certainly believe that it is better to find new friends for some specific reasons.
The most important reason is that people occasionally leave their city life and move to new places. It is obvious, because of communicative devices like cellphones and Internets we can be in touch with old friends but everybody needs to spend time with somebodies. An example come to my mind is for studying biochemistry, I went to Shiraz, a big city about 500 kilometers from my hometown, Tehran. At the first, I just was talking with my old high school friends by cellphone. After few months, I felt depression. During consulting time with a university psychologist, she advised me talking with phones and cellphones are not enough and told me make new friends and spend more leisure time with them. After spending time with my new friends from classrooms, university campus and clubs, I certainly, felt better. This experience taught me we definitely need new friends in our life.
Another important reason is that, we change a lot during our life, from single to married, from uneducated to distinguished scientist, from lazy to professional athlete. By changing our situation we could not be with old friends in old situations. One of my best friend was very close to me when she was unmarried woman. We went to clubs, movie theaters, and even vacations with each other. After great marriage, she began to meet me less and less and spend more and more with her husband and new couple friends like herself. After giving the second birth, now we just see one or two times at the year. Once I complained about her new strange behavior, she told me as married mother, she needs to be with persons who have same situation and issues to teach and help each other. In addition she have not enough time for her old single friends. As you can see, her new situation, in fact, forced her to find new friends instead of being with old best friends.
In sum, though some may support to keep old friends for a long time, in my view it is better to make new friends. It is not only important because of changing of city life but changing situation in life.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 584, Rule ID: ADVISE_VBG[3]
Message: Verbs 'advise' and 'remind' are used with infinitive: 'to talk'.
Suggestion: to talk
...university psychologist, she advised me talking with phones and cellphones are not enou...
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Line 3, column 781, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[2]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: addition,
...issues to teach and help each other. In addition she have not enough time for her old si...
^^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 794, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[1]
Message: The pronoun 'she' must be used with a third-person verb: 'has'.
Suggestion: has
...ch and help each other. In addition she have not enough time for her old single frie...
^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, if, may, second, so, in addition, in fact, in my view, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 15.1003584229 119% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 9.8082437276 61% => OK
Conjunction : 19.0 13.8261648746 137% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.0286738351 63% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 56.0 43.0788530466 130% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 66.0 52.1666666667 127% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1980.0 1977.66487455 100% => OK
No of words: 430.0 407.700716846 105% => OK
Chars per words: 4.60465116279 4.8611393121 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.55372829156 4.48103885553 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.50966331434 2.67179642975 94% => OK
Unique words: 202.0 212.727598566 95% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.46976744186 0.524837075471 90% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 594.0 618.680645161 96% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 16.0 9.59856630824 167% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 7.0 3.51792114695 199% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 17.0 4.94265232975 344% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 20.6003584229 112% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 41.4223486066 48.9658058833 85% => OK
Chars per sentence: 86.0869565217 100.406767564 86% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.6956521739 20.6045352989 91% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.65217391304 5.45110844103 67% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 17.0 11.8709677419 143% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.251504464694 0.236089414692 107% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0795173796928 0.076458572812 104% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0556391114659 0.0737576698707 75% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.171807749212 0.150856017488 114% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.00640506579589 0.0645574589148 10% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.6 11.7677419355 82% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 70.13 58.1214874552 121% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.9 10.1575268817 78% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.4 10.9000537634 86% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.92 8.01818996416 86% => OK
difficult_words: 65.0 86.8835125448 75% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 10.002688172 75% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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