Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
Movies and television have more negative effects than positive effects on the way young people behave.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Technology has a tremendous impact on our lives and well-being. It enhances our success endlessly because it encompasses our core. Therefore, I adamantly agree that movies and television have more negative effects than positive effects on the young people behave because it affected youth's health, education, and personality.
First and foremost, movies and TV have a crucial implication on young people welfare. In fact, watching different programs and advertisements on Tv encourages children to eat unhealthy food. For instance, I have the son; he is seven years old, whenever he saw the announcement regarding the junk food, he asked me about ice cream, fries, and burger which negatively influences on his health. I realized that he started gaining in weight. Moreover, he spends ample of time watching these paid advertisements instead that he working out, as a result, his physical appearance affected considerably because of he spent vast of time sitting and eating not nutritious materials which prone him to weight-related disorder. Hence, young people should reassess their priority and exchange them for more beneficial thing.
Second, flourishing technology such as movies and television have a profound effect on kids education. Indeed, inventive technology pushes the children away from the essential skills like improving their teaching. For example, nowadays, the young people are busy in watching movies and going to the cinema, they became passionate about wasting their time to do this activity rather than focusing on their education and enhancing their knowledge acquisition. Besides, Movies and television have a dramatic impact on youth personalities. Spending extra time in watching movies pushes the young people to become socially awkward because rather than they cooperate and collaborate with other peers in the same age, they do this activity which crucially hurts their interpersonal skills, and they will become selfish because they squander their time alone rather than to spend time with people. Therefore, young people should be under control when they watch the television.
For the reasons mentioned above, from my perspective, I believe that movies and television harm youth's health, education and personality. Hopefully, all parents should be aware of the serious implication of movies and television.
Comments
Essay evaluation report
flaws:
the topic is for 'young people', but the first example is for a seven year old kid.
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 20 in 30
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 17 15
No. of Words: 357 350
No. of Characters: 1938 1500
No. of Different Words: 201 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.347 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.429 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.78 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 157 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 114 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 87 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 55 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 21 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 13.39 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.588 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.333 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.519 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.138 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 4 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 284, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[2]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'youths'' or 'youth's'?
Suggestion: youths'; youth's
...young people behave because it affected youths health, education, and personality. ...
^^^^^^
Line 3, column 596, Rule ID: BECAUSE_OF_I[1]
Message: Probable usage error. Use 'because he' instead.
Suggestion: because he
...ysical appearance affected considerably because of he spent vast of time sitting and eating n...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
besides, first, hence, if, moreover, regarding, second, so, therefore, well, for example, for instance, in fact, such as, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 5.0 15.1003584229 33% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 9.8082437276 41% => OK
Conjunction : 18.0 13.8261648746 130% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.0286738351 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 43.0 43.0788530466 100% => OK
Preposition: 35.0 52.1666666667 67% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.0752688172 111% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1993.0 1977.66487455 101% => OK
No of words: 357.0 407.700716846 88% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.58263305322 4.8611393121 115% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.34677393335 4.48103885553 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.86698201487 2.67179642975 107% => OK
Unique words: 202.0 212.727598566 95% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.565826330532 0.524837075471 108% => OK
syllable_count: 612.0 618.680645161 99% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.51630824373 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.59856630824 115% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.94265232975 40% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.6003584229 83% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 84.1141504827 48.9658058833 172% => OK
Chars per sentence: 117.235294118 100.406767564 117% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.0 20.6045352989 102% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.82352941176 5.45110844103 144% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 11.8709677419 59% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.220608299656 0.236089414692 93% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0741481878184 0.076458572812 97% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0915783347266 0.0737576698707 124% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.13782219452 0.150856017488 91% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0694439970304 0.0645574589148 108% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.4 11.7677419355 131% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 41.7 58.1214874552 72% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 6.10430107527 183% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 10.1575268817 125% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 15.08 10.9000537634 138% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.97 8.01818996416 112% => OK
difficult_words: 97.0 86.8835125448 112% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 10.002688172 90% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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