Do you agree or disagree with following statement?
People to day spend to much time on personal enjoyment-doing things they like to do-rather than doing things they should to do.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
People are more and more busy in modern life. It is often that people wish they have more than twenty-four hours a day to do all thing what they want. There is an argument that people today take too much time to do what they like than doing what they should do. In my opinion, I believe that people have spent too much time to do what they should do and gradually forget to care with their bobbies, their personal enjoyment.
Modern life with varieties of difficulties and issue, people are facing with them from day to day. People, especially adults, spend almost time of day at offices to do their jobs, earn money. Although schedule time is eight hours a day, the fact is not similar to that. People have plus time working every day to afford their living, that is what they should do. People even do not have time for their personal enjoyment. I want to talk about an example of my mother. She goes to the office from 8 am and just comes back home at 7 pm, after that, she does all the housework, cooks meal for my family up to 10 pm. What does she do after 10 pm? It is a fact that she is too tired to do anything else, she just goes to her bed. In general, I believe that life more develop, people have less time for their favorites.
Additionally, it is often with a lot of people that their personal enjoyment is also what people should do. I mean people do their work with their favorite and happiness. When people do what they like, they can have motivation to do it better. Otherwise, people will just do because of responsibility and earning for living. There is a fact that, people trend to choose their future job depend on what they love. So, their job is also their hobby. It is difficult to say if they are doing what they keen on or what they should do.
Some people can spend too much time of their life on their personal hobbies. I mean not useful hobbies such as playing game, clubs, ... They can lose purpose of their life because of those favorites. However, I believe that it just be a short period time and they will be fed up with them early. After those time, people will have more experiment, they will treasure every second of their life. As a result, people will have more responsibility with their life and choose true road to go on.
In conclusion, I think that people should have more positive view on how to see a work is personal enjoyment or must-do work. Sometimes it is not separated between them. Besides that, modern life makes people even have less time for their hobbies and entertainment. Relaxing after hard work is essential for all people.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 4, column 472, Rule ID: AFFORD_VB[1]
Message: This verb is used with the infinitive: 'to true'
Suggestion: to true
...sponsibility with their life and choose true road to go on. In conclusion, I think ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, however, if, second, so, i mean, i think, in conclusion, in general, such as, as a result, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 15.1003584229 132% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 15.0 9.8082437276 153% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 13.8261648746 80% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 11.0286738351 127% => OK
Pronoun: 74.0 43.0788530466 172% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 58.0 52.1666666667 111% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.0752688172 99% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2111.0 1977.66487455 107% => OK
No of words: 480.0 407.700716846 118% => OK
Chars per words: 4.39791666667 4.8611393121 90% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.68069463864 4.48103885553 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.2327495071 2.67179642975 84% => OK
Unique words: 202.0 212.727598566 95% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.420833333333 0.524837075471 80% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 655.2 618.680645161 106% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 20.0 9.59856630824 208% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Interrogative: 2.0 0.994623655914 201% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 31.0 20.6003584229 150% => OK
Sentence length: 15.0 20.1344086022 74% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 29.8287516077 48.9658058833 61% => OK
Chars per sentence: 68.0967741935 100.406767564 68% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.4838709677 20.6045352989 75% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.83870967742 5.45110844103 70% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 11.8709677419 126% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 13.0 4.88709677419 266% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.396454377189 0.236089414692 168% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.134032053353 0.076458572812 175% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.126546039241 0.0737576698707 172% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.264144235408 0.150856017488 175% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.139966770498 0.0645574589148 217% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 7.0 11.7677419355 59% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 73.17 58.1214874552 126% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 6.8 10.1575268817 67% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 7.94 10.9000537634 73% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.42 8.01818996416 80% => OK
difficult_words: 62.0 86.8835125448 71% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.002688172 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.0 10.0537634409 80% => OK
text_standard: 7.0 10.247311828 68% => The average readability is low. Need to imporve the language.
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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