Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
Playing computer games is a waste of time. children should not be allowed to play them.
Some of the thinkers say we are in the computer era because of the presence of computer technology in almost all aspects of human life. One of the main aspects of human activity is entertainment and game and as a matter of fact, computer technology affected this area as well. This effect shows itself in VideoGames and computer games which have much diversity. No doubt people who attract with these games aren't just children but absolutely there are fundamental issues associated with their parent. some of them agree on this using and playing games, but others say these games just waste the children's time and destroy their future. I can't account for the later idea because of two reasons.
First of all, I think that in the modern era, children should spend much time in their home and some other close buildings such as class without much excitement. Having played with computer games might help them to have a glad entertainment and help them to be productive and fresh people. Also, some researchers show that playing the game makes more adrenalin in child's brain and that's a good news for gamers.
Secondly, I believe that playing with some of the well-designed game, could increase the ability of abstraction in children and also could improve their creativity. for example, in some of the games child should think about how to manage equipment and how to use some possibility. I remember myself, which was playing one of this strategic game and that effect on my real life to control my asset which my father gave me.
Absolutely there are some disadvantages with children playing the game, such as using inappropriate content or increasing the tendency of fight in some of them or making the children disconnected from family, but by and large, I prefer to allow children to play the game because I believe it has advantages that overcame the possible disadvantages.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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...n in child's brain and that's a good news for gamers. Secondly, I believe tha...
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...creativity. for example, in some of the games child should think about how to manage ...
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Discourse Markers used:
['also', 'but', 'first', 'if', 'second', 'secondly', 'so', 'well', 'for example', 'i think', 'no doubt', 'such as', 'as a matter of fact', 'by and large', 'first of all']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.232876712329 0.229887763892 101% => OK
Verbs: 0.150684931507 0.158761421928 95% => OK
Adjectives: 0.0684931506849 0.0866891130778 79% => OK
Adverbs: 0.027397260274 0.046263068375 59% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0602739726027 0.0685040099705 88% => OK
Prepositions: 0.134246575342 0.118717715034 113% => OK
Participles: 0.0328767123288 0.0351676179071 93% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.75532864419 2.67179642975 103% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0191780821918 0.0309702414327 62% => OK
Particles: 0.0 0.00188951952338 0% => More particles wanted.
Determiners: 0.0986301369863 0.0887237588012 111% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0164383561644 0.0209618222197 78% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.0219178082192 0.0139019557991 158% => OK
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 1918.0 2387.08602151 80% => OK
No of words: 320.0 408.028673835 78% => More words wanted.
Chars per words: 5.99375 5.86048508987 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.22948505376 4.48200974243 94% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.3125 0.338922669872 92% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.253125 0.251872472559 100% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.171875 0.174417080927 99% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.103125 0.112833075102 91% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.75532864419 2.67179642975 103% => OK
Unique words: 171.0 212.727598566 80% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.534375 0.524397521467 102% => OK
Word variations: 55.93143013 59.2087087015 94% => OK
How many sentences: 13.0 20.6684587814 63% => OK
Sentence length: 24.6153846154 20.5533526081 120% => OK
Sentence length SD: 64.593860884 48.84282405 132% => OK
Chars per sentence: 147.538461538 120.699889404 122% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.6153846154 20.5533526081 120% => OK
Discourse Markers: 1.15384615385 0.644075263715 179% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.5376344086 88% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 5.54480286738 126% => OK
Readability: 49.9278846154 45.7405998639 109% => OK
Elegance: 1.67816091954 1.45489161554 115% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.312500443962 0.300154397459 104% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.110751309103 0.103427244359 107% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0980015907377 0.0752933317313 130% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.546449205431 0.497263757937 110% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.167677409007 0.151897553556 110% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.128469565908 0.114077575197 113% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.06531138888 0.0781384742642 84% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.351738191855 0.336927656856 104% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.00413395616312 0.067059652881 6% => Paragraphs are so close to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.215979567499 0.210909579961 102% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0388487236926 0.0618886996521 63% => OK
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 11.8870967742 50% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.86379928315 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.91756272401 81% => OK
Positive topic words: 6.0 8.42114695341 71% => OK
Negative topic words: 3.0 2.4623655914 122% => OK
Neutral topic words: 4.0 2.75985663082 145% => OK
Total topic words: 13.0 13.6433691756 95% => OK
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Rates: 80 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 24 Out of 30