Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
Successful people try new things and take risks rather than only doing what they know how to do well.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Our activities have a tremendous impact on our lives and well-being. They enhance our success endlessly because they encompass our core. Therefore, I adamantly agree that successful people try new things and take risks rather than only doing what they know how to do well.
First, being immersed in a new activity has a tremendous influence on your health. Indeed, when people are engaging in a new task or exercise, this will improve their welfare. For instance, I used to work out every day about an hour, playing a trad mall to get rid of extra weight, so, I execute this exercise every day, but I could not see any difference in my weight, However, when I decided to try a new device in the gym, I realized that my weight starting fall. This experience helps me to learn that I have to try and engage in a new skill to get a vital result. Besides, when I started to use another device such as the elliptical, this helped me to build my muscle and boost my physical appearance. Hence, having a new experience and activity is the foundation to flourish your health.
Second, being involved in a new thing has a profound effect on your education. Indeed, attending in a new skill broaden your horizon. For example, when I was in the university, I accustomed to taking the only classes that easy to me such as biology and psychology. After a while, I decided to take a risk and try to attend in the chemistry class which was difficult for me. I noticed that when I engaged in this class, my knowledge acquisition boost, I became an educated person in this field. Also, having this tough lesson helps me to feel an accomplishment because when I write down the exam of this lesson, I got a high grade which helps me to feel an excitement, and at the same time, it gives me a vital opportunity to make a new friend because I met a new peer in this class. As you can see, involving in a new experience boost your education.
For the reasons mentioned above, from my perspective, it is highly beneficial to do new activities rather than do what you know. Not only to progress your health but also to widen your horizon. Hopefully, all people follow this strategy to improve the populace.
Comments
Essay evaluation report
flaws:
1. the second paragraph is out of the topic. We didn't see any 'risks'.
2. don't always use your personal experiences as examples.
3. don't always use 'I' as the subject of the sentences.
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 17 in 30
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 19 15
No. of Words: 397 350
No. of Characters: 1734 1500
No. of Different Words: 201 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.464 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.368 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.527 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 112 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 78 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 53 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 36 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 20.895 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 13.742 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.579 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.344 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.515 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.139 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 4 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 517, Rule ID: TRY_AND[1]
Message: "Try and" is common in colloquial speech, but "'try to'" is recommended for writing.
Suggestion: try to
...rience helps me to learn that I have to try and engage in a new skill to get a vital re...
^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, but, first, hence, however, if, second, so, therefore, well, while, for example, for instance, such as, you know
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 15.1003584229 53% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 9.8082437276 31% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 13.8261648746 80% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.0286738351 118% => OK
Pronoun: 64.0 43.0788530466 149% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 46.0 52.1666666667 88% => OK
Nominalization: 14.0 8.0752688172 173% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1795.0 1977.66487455 91% => OK
No of words: 397.0 407.700716846 97% => OK
Chars per words: 4.52141057935 4.8611393121 93% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.46372701284 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.63918311515 2.67179642975 99% => OK
Unique words: 206.0 212.727598566 97% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.518891687657 0.524837075471 99% => OK
syllable_count: 575.1 618.680645161 93% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 17.0 9.59856630824 177% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.51792114695 171% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.94265232975 40% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6003584229 92% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 65.4272131579 48.9658058833 134% => OK
Chars per sentence: 94.4736842105 100.406767564 94% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.8947368421 20.6045352989 101% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.68421052632 5.45110844103 123% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.269921413328 0.236089414692 114% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0977169112543 0.076458572812 128% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.144527244074 0.0737576698707 196% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.21808546458 0.150856017488 145% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.141275395557 0.0645574589148 219% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.3 11.7677419355 88% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 68.1 58.1214874552 117% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 10.1575268817 86% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.94 10.9000537634 82% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.85 8.01818996416 98% => OK
difficult_words: 81.0 86.8835125448 93% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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