It is a highly debated issue whether or not taking risks and trying a new thing is good for the success of the people, or they have to do just the familiar elements to be also successful persons, and this can approach from different angles due to its complexity. Deeply deliberating to the issue. Personally, I believe that trying a new way and passing through the risk is a perfect tool for everyone to be successful in the future life and the following discussion reveals my stand and reasoning.
First, without engaging in dangerous and risky activities can not discover a new thing and become a new theory or novel. Take my self as a real example; I am a pharmacist and iI worked with the drug company for about ten years. This company takes a risk to discover a new way to treat cancer especially colon cancer. And the manager of the factory takes that risk to try the medicine on his body because he had that kind of cancer and then after several trials and years he becomes wholly recovered from cancer and enjoys his life as a healthy new person. Moreover, he refused to marry for years due to that disease but now he has two kids with healthy bodies.
Second, taking risk is an excellent opportunity to broaden our horizons. I also consider my self as an example, seven years ago I was coming to the United States. In the beginning, I refused to come here and ultimately rejected the idea because we have to change our lives and start a new one, but my husband insisted. But after that, we decided to take the risk and explore a new land. Now, I got the pharmacy evaluation test and in the process of complete the way to gain the license rather than stay in my own country and do the same boring duties every day. I mean without that chance, I can not broaden my knowledge and get an extreme risk to become a pharmacist who can work in any other company around the world.
By the way to the conclusion, based on the arguments explored above, I firmly concur that taking a risk and trying a new thing is the best way to discover a new idea and to widen our education
Essay evaluation report
without engaging in dangerous and risky activities can not discover a new thing
without engaging in dangerous and risky activities, people can not discover a new thing
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flaws:
don't' always use personal experiences.
also need more arguments.
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 19 in 30
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 1 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 15 15
No. of Words: 387 350
No. of Characters: 1656 1500
No. of Different Words: 200 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.435 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.279 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.347 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 113 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 77 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 41 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 24 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 25.8 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 12.259 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.667 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.357 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.535 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.126 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 4 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 30, Rule ID: WHETHER[7]
Message: Perhaps you can shorten this phrase to just 'whether'. It is correct though if you mean 'regardless of whether'.
Suggestion: whether
It is a highly debated issue whether or not taking risks and trying a new thing is ...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 4, column 194, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...er a new idea and to widen our education
^^^^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, moreover, second, so, then, i mean, kind of, by the way
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 15.1003584229 53% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 9.8082437276 41% => OK
Conjunction : 26.0 13.8261648746 188% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.0286738351 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 38.0 43.0788530466 88% => OK
Preposition: 45.0 52.1666666667 86% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 8.0752688172 25% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1691.0 1977.66487455 86% => OK
No of words: 387.0 407.700716846 95% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.36950904393 4.8611393121 90% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.43534841618 4.48103885553 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.42430697734 2.67179642975 91% => OK
Unique words: 200.0 212.727598566 94% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.516795865633 0.524837075471 98% => OK
syllable_count: 549.9 618.680645161 89% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 9.59856630824 125% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 3.51792114695 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 5.0 1.86738351254 268% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 20.6003584229 73% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 25.0 20.1344086022 124% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 64.2379603938 48.9658058833 131% => OK
Chars per sentence: 112.733333333 100.406767564 112% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.8 20.6045352989 125% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.13333333333 5.45110844103 94% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 11.8709677419 67% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.199173964546 0.236089414692 84% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0637364929005 0.076458572812 83% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0496750153064 0.0737576698707 67% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.126896273895 0.150856017488 84% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0398130004893 0.0645574589148 62% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.1 11.7677419355 103% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 63.02 58.1214874552 108% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 10.1575268817 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.36 10.9000537634 77% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.94 8.01818996416 99% => OK
difficult_words: 75.0 86.8835125448 86% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 10.002688172 135% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.0537634409 119% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 66.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 20.0 Out of 30
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