Do you agree or disagree with the following statement
Successful people try new things and take risks rather than what they already know how to do well.
The success in the life is the target of everybody, each one is working hard during his life in order to success in his personal life, his career and his social life, how to be success ? Someone said taking risk is one of the most important thing to be success, another on claimed making your work with profeciency and accuracy.
The risk takers are usually have a lot of knowldge in different thing and have tremandous life experience, because they are trying a new thing as much as they can, that in turn, increase their ability and help them to equib themselves with the essential skills to cope the life challenges, therefore, they are more successful than other people who prefer to do the same thing and never do any thing new, as a recent newspaper mentioned, that the people who are challenging themselves with huge number of things, they would have the potential to be successful in the future 40% more than the people who don’t like to adventure any thing new. Although, some one say that taking risks all the time may lead to a lot of mistake, that may make a bad impact on the person life, may be that is true to some extend, but, on the other hand, for sure the bad results are not as much as the good results that the person can earn from trying anew things. So taking risks are so important to be strong and successful but everyone have to be wise of where and when it is appropirate to try a new things.
Adventurous people are usually have more self confidence and higher self esteem rather than the people don’t take any risks in their life, as the person is challenging himself all the time, then, he see the good result and see his ability to pass these challenges, thus, for sure will make him more confidence, more self relying and he will be more confident in the future. Some people think that trying a new thing all the time may distract them and decrease their ability to achieve any success in their life, but, as one of the business owner said in a TV program, that most of his successful business are from his tendency to trying a new field of investment that have never tried before by anyone.
In sum, personally, I think taking risks and trying a new thing during the life is the fundamental approach to be success and to improve our life. Everyone have to try anew thing in his life in order to increase his self esteem and his self confidence, also, to nourish his life with a new experience that may help him in all part of his life, for sure he would make mistakes, and may be feel depressed some times, but the results are worthing the time and the efforts .
Grammar and spelling errors:
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...our work with profeciency and accuracy. The risk takers are usually have a lot o...
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...ssful than other people who prefer to do the same thing and never do any thing ne...
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...efer to do the same thing and never do any thing new, as a recent newspaper mentioned, t...
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...people who don't like to adventure any thing new. Although, some one say that taking...
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...t taking risks all the time may lead to a lot of mistake, that may make a bad impact on the pers...
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...erson life, may be that is true to some extend, but, on the other hand, for sure the b...
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...llenging himself all the time, then, he see the good result and see his ability to ...
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...ts are worthing the time and the efforts .
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, may, so, then, therefore, thus, i think, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 25.0 15.1003584229 166% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 9.8082437276 122% => OK
Conjunction : 18.0 13.8261648746 130% => OK
Relative clauses : 15.0 11.0286738351 136% => OK
Pronoun: 45.0 43.0788530466 104% => OK
Preposition: 59.0 52.1666666667 113% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2129.0 1977.66487455 108% => OK
No of words: 480.0 407.700716846 118% => OK
Chars per words: 4.43541666667 4.8611393121 91% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.68069463864 4.48103885553 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.34198550239 2.67179642975 88% => OK
Unique words: 192.0 212.727598566 90% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.4 0.524837075471 76% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 676.8 618.680645161 109% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Interrogative: 1.0 0.994623655914 101% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 9.0 20.6003584229 44% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 53.0 20.1344086022 263% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 153.229755677 48.9658058833 313% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 236.555555556 100.406767564 236% => Less chars_per_sentence wanted.
Words per sentence: 53.3333333333 20.6045352989 259% => Less words per sentence wanted.
Discourse Markers: 8.11111111111 5.45110844103 149% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 13.0 5.5376344086 235% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8709677419 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.85842293907 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.88709677419 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.20528906084 0.236089414692 87% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.100366791107 0.076458572812 131% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0711487848536 0.0737576698707 96% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.131850075792 0.150856017488 87% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0717982296275 0.0645574589148 111% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 26.1 11.7677419355 222% => Automated_readability_index is high.
flesch_reading_ease: 34.6 58.1214874552 60% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 21.6 10.1575268817 213% => Flesch kincaid grade is high.
coleman_liau_index: 9.36 10.9000537634 86% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.44 8.01818996416 105% => OK
difficult_words: 66.0 86.8835125448 76% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 18.0 10.002688172 180% => OK
gunning_fog: 23.2 10.0537634409 231% => Gunning_fog is high.
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 66.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 20.0 Out of 30
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