Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
Television advertising directed towards young children (aged two to five) should not be allowed.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Television advertising is very important now a days. Many people buy daily stuff through seeing television advertising or other kind advertising which they will see on newspaper. Some people believe that television advertising directed towards young children aged two to five should not be allowed. Others disagree. In my view, television advertising directed should not be allowed for two important reasons.
The main reason is that start-up company may misuse it. As a children they don't know how to judge even parents are there in this case they might influence by money. For example, the child which is of say 2 years old honestly this child don't know anything about advertising so if parents green signaled for a 2 years baby to play a role in a startup company which is for advertising soap or any other skin material, once the advertising is done this start-up company will surely play in television by seeing that many people may impress they might end up buying their stuffs. But if something wrong happens it will effect all other children who have used it. As you can see, this will effect 2 year old baby and also other children too if the child is kind of mature means this kind of advertising will not going to take place.
Another reason is that it will effect child image once they grown older. If something turns out to be bad from that advertising it will surely uncomfortable for that child. For example, the same child if that advertising clicks or it is genuine means many will give good opinion on that child but if it does not turns good means that child will be blamed and off course start-up company too. That child has not to blame according to me because it's not the child mistake or their parents mistake it's the mistake of that company and also that rules they have made. This experience taught me that this kind of rules should not be encouraged, if they do also these are the consequences they have to face, it is not good for child too.
In sum, television advertising should not be encouraged for the children whose age is less than five. Not only effect the advertising child and other children but also it will effect the advertised child growth. So before this kind of results the parents should take care of their children and they also not to encourage this kinds of advertising.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Did you mean 'nowadays'?
Suggestion: nowadays
...elevision advertising is very important now a days. Many people buy daily stuff through se...
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Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'a day' or simply 'days'?
Suggestion: a day; days
...ision advertising is very important now a days. Many people buy daily stuff through se...
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...e on newspaper. Some people believe that television advertising directed towards ...
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Message: “As” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...is that start-up company may misuse it. As a children they dont know how to judge ...
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Line 3, column 60, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[1]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'a child' or simply 'children'?
Suggestion: a child; children
...that start-up company may misuse it. As a children they dont know how to judge even parent...
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Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: don't
...mpany may misuse it. As a children they dont know how to judge even parents are ther...
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... of say 2 years old honestly this child dont know anything about advertising so if p...
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Line 3, column 615, Rule ID: AFFECT_EFFECT[6]
Message: Did you mean 'affect'?
Suggestion: affect
... But if something wrong happens it will effect all other children who have used it. As...
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Message: Did you mean 'affect'?
Suggestion: affect
...have used it. As you can see, this will effect 2 year old baby and also other children...
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Message: The verb 'will' requires the base form of the verb: 'go'
Suggestion: go
...means this kind of advertising will not going to take place. Another reason is tha...
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Line 5, column 32, Rule ID: AFFECT_EFFECT[6]
Message: Did you mean 'affect'?
Suggestion: affect
...lace. Another reason is that it will effect child image once they grown older. If s...
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Line 5, column 313, Rule ID: DOES_X_HAS[1]
Message: Did you mean 'turn'? As 'do' is already inflected, the verb cannot also be inflected.
Suggestion: turn
...pinion on that child but if it does not turns good means that child will be blamed an...
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Suggestion: turn
...pinion on that child but if it does not turns good means that child will be blamed an...
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Message: Did you mean 'it's' (='it is') instead of 'its' (possessive pronoun)?
Suggestion: it's; it is
... child mistake or their parents mistake its the mistake of that company and also th...
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Line 7, column 112, Rule ID: AFFECT_EFFECT[7]
Message: Did you mean 'affect'?
Suggestion: affect
...n whose age is less than five. Not only effect the advertising child and other childre...
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Message: Did you mean 'affect'?
Suggestion: affect
...ild and other children but also it will effect the advertised child growth. So before ...
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Line 7, column 322, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[1]
Message: Did you mean 'these'?
Suggestion: these
...children and they also not to encourage this kinds of advertising.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, honestly, if, may, so, for example, kind of, in my view
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 15.1003584229 119% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 20.0 9.8082437276 204% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 12.0 13.8261648746 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 18.0 11.0286738351 163% => OK
Pronoun: 50.0 43.0788530466 116% => OK
Preposition: 36.0 52.1666666667 69% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 8.0752688172 25% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1918.0 1977.66487455 97% => OK
No of words: 409.0 407.700716846 100% => OK
Chars per words: 4.68948655257 4.8611393121 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.49708221141 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.44137140866 2.67179642975 91% => OK
Unique words: 176.0 212.727598566 83% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.430317848411 0.524837075471 82% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 584.1 618.680645161 94% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 9.59856630824 42% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.94265232975 40% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.6003584229 83% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 24.0 20.1344086022 119% => OK
Sentence length SD: 83.1978899305 48.9658058833 170% => OK
Chars per sentence: 112.823529412 100.406767564 112% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.0588235294 20.6045352989 117% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.88235294118 5.45110844103 71% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 17.0 5.5376344086 307% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8709677419 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.183264314093 0.236089414692 78% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0871214745391 0.076458572812 114% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.107418300985 0.0737576698707 146% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.153249083386 0.150856017488 102% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.102455177777 0.0645574589148 159% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.7 11.7677419355 108% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 64.04 58.1214874552 110% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 10.1575268817 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.22 10.9000537634 94% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.53 8.01818996416 81% => OK
difficult_words: 44.0 86.8835125448 51% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 10.002688172 75% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.0537634409 115% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 61.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.5 Out of 30
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.