Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
The opinions of celebrities, such as famous entertainers and athletes, are more important to younger people than they are to older people.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
The new millenium is an era of rapid techonological changes and enormous use of different social platforms. Unlike the age of our parents, when there was ony one tv show per day, for many young people reading Facebook statues or watch Instagram stories became a way of learning about life values. that is why Famous entertainers and celebrities are the ones whose messages are reaching broad audience, especcialy the young one. I think that young generation finds it in fact more important to look upon those celebrities than the old generation and in this essay the reasons for my opinion will be provided.
Firstly, youth today have experience rapid technological changes and they adapted to them quite well. young people have learned how to multitask and devote their attention to the information they need. those youth oftentimes follow different celebrities and listen to their messages on daily basis. it came as no surprise that those celebrities became their leaders and idols. However older people haven't adapted to quickly and they still refuse to use any technology that is not necessary to them. this unfortunately means that celebrities messages don't really reach the older generation. In my opinion, because of the aforementioned reasons older generation don't really find celebrities important.
In addition to that, young people are in the fragile stage of their lives. they are actively looking for a positive rolemodels wich oftetimes leads them to celebrities and athlets. Times have changes and youth are no longer searching for idlos among family member, because they are not cool enough. older people on the other hand, already have formed opinions and attitued and are not in an active search for any idols. having said that, it cacn be agreed upon, that celebrities are far more affecting the lives of the youth.
Finally, the platforms young people are using are differ from the older generations platforms. And while youth use social media and have more chances to stumble upon the celebrities, old people read more books or communicate face to face. because of that, older generations have not really develop the habit of relying on the influence of the celebrities and entertainment. For example, I am a vegan and for me it was very important to hear al the celebritiy vegans, while my mother purely statet that cellebrities are making profit out of being vegan.
To sum up, celebities and entertainers are a great source of influence for younger genetarion and not so much for the older ones. The reasons for it are the following: older generations are not being adapted to techology advances, they are of an age when no rolemodels are needed and social media is not really their primal source of information.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
finally, first, firstly, however, if, look, really, so, still, well, while, for example, i think, in addition, in fact, in my opinion, to sum up, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 26.0 15.1003584229 172% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 2.0 9.8082437276 20% => OK
Conjunction : 21.0 13.8261648746 152% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.0286738351 118% => OK
Pronoun: 41.0 43.0788530466 95% => OK
Preposition: 44.0 52.1666666667 84% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 8.0752688172 161% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2299.0 1977.66487455 116% => OK
No of words: 453.0 407.700716846 111% => OK
Chars per words: 5.07505518764 4.8611393121 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.61343653406 4.48103885553 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.71754778378 2.67179642975 102% => OK
Unique words: 231.0 212.727598566 109% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.509933774834 0.524837075471 97% => OK
syllable_count: 744.3 618.680645161 120% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.59856630824 104% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 20.6003584229 107% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 36.3220216425 48.9658058833 74% => OK
Chars per sentence: 104.5 100.406767564 104% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.5909090909 20.6045352989 100% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.40909090909 5.45110844103 136% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 15.0 5.5376344086 271% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.154063072847 0.236089414692 65% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0481824008086 0.076458572812 63% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0296599963423 0.0737576698707 40% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0917485372748 0.150856017488 61% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.00539281260675 0.0645574589148 8% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.8 11.7677419355 109% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 51.18 58.1214874552 88% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 10.1575268817 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.18 10.9000537634 112% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.29 8.01818996416 103% => OK
difficult_words: 105.0 86.8835125448 121% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 10.002688172 145% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.247311828 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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