Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
Young people nowadays do not give enough time to helping their communities.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
The life today is vastly different from it was before. Many areas in the world are affected by the enormous changes that happened whether positively or negatively. Therefore, I adamantly agree that young people nowadays do not give enough time to helping their communities, because of the invention of technology pushes the youth away from the essential things.
First and foremost, sophisticated technology has a crucial impact on the new era's achievement. The3 matter of fact, the young people nowadays are becoming passionate about wasting their time immersing in technology such as video games. For instance, I have a child; he is ten years old, he used to spend leisure time playing games. He does not squander any time to serve his community such as trying to organize a group for example to help the poor children or to help the students who have difficulties in studying. Besides, these technical developments are affecting the new generation's communication skills because they spent ample time with these devices rather than they are cooperation and collaboration with other peers in the same age. They are becoming socially awkward. Hence, I believe that young people are less involved in serving their country.
Second, flourishing technology has a negative influence on students personality. Indeed, the students in the school are becoming to allocate enormous time in social media rather than they are involving in valuable activities in their school. For instance, because of the availability of the cell phone, the students became addicted to them because they spent more time sending messages, surfing on the internet, or browsing on the facebook. I realized that they are less involved in serving their school. However, they the students should do some vital activities to improve their school such as volunteering in the library to arrange the books or helping the low-level students, they should try to evolve their community to improve the quality of their lives. As you can see, the young people should reassess their priority and exchange them to flourish their country.
For the reasons mentioned above, from my perspective, the new era nowadays do not give enough time to helping their communities, because the technical innovation is affected dramatically on their roles in the public. Hopefully, the young people should be aware of the importance involving on the community to improve the populace.
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Essay evaluation report
that happened whether positively or negatively.
that happened either positively or negatively. //either ...or...
because of the invention of technology pushes the youth away from the essential things.
because the invention of technology pushes the youth away from the essential things. //because of + nouns; because + sentence
the new era nowadays do not give enough time
in the new era nowadays young people do not give enough time
the new era nowadays does not give enough time
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flaws:
1. the topic is for 'young people', so you can't use your child who is 10 as an example.
2. a lot of sentences start with 'they'.
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 18 in 30
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 3 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 18 15
No. of Words: 389 350
No. of Characters: 1995 1500
No. of Different Words: 200 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.441 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.129 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.698 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 150 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 119 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 86 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 45 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 21.611 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 10.307 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.556 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.307 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.478 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.083 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 4 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 78, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[2]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'eras'' or 'era's'?
Suggestion: eras'; era's
...hnology has a crucial impact on the new eras achievement. The3 matter of fact, the y...
^^^^
Line 3, column 578, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'generations'' or 'generation's'?
Suggestion: generations'; generation's
...ical developments are affecting the new generations communication skills because they spent...
^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 5, column 60, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[2]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'students'' or 'student's'?
Suggestion: students'; student's
... technology has a negative influence on students personality. Indeed, the students in th...
^^^^^^^^
Line 5, column 189, Rule ID: PROGRESSIVE_VERBS[1]
Message: This verb is normally not used in the progressive form. Try a simple form instead.
...s time in social media rather than they are involving in valuable activities in their school....
^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
besides, first, hence, however, if, second, so, therefore, for example, for instance, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 15.1003584229 93% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 9.8082437276 51% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 13.8261648746 51% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 5.0 11.0286738351 45% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 39.0 43.0788530466 91% => OK
Preposition: 49.0 52.1666666667 94% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.0752688172 124% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2045.0 1977.66487455 103% => OK
No of words: 389.0 407.700716846 95% => OK
Chars per words: 5.25706940874 4.8611393121 108% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.44106776838 4.48103885553 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.77988207153 2.67179642975 104% => OK
Unique words: 197.0 212.727598566 93% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.506426735219 0.524837075471 96% => OK
syllable_count: 647.1 618.680645161 105% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.51630824373 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.59856630824 115% => OK
Article: 7.0 3.08781362007 227% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6003584229 87% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 63.8185119627 48.9658058833 130% => OK
Chars per sentence: 113.611111111 100.406767564 113% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.6111111111 20.6045352989 105% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.16666666667 5.45110844103 95% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.27336216503 0.236089414692 116% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0805772967119 0.076458572812 105% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0931428681689 0.0737576698707 126% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.194057631935 0.150856017488 129% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.059560966227 0.0645574589148 92% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.1 11.7677419355 120% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 41.7 58.1214874552 72% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 10.1575268817 125% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.23 10.9000537634 121% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.7 8.01818996416 109% => OK
difficult_words: 99.0 86.8835125448 114% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 10.002688172 90% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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