Do you agree or disagree? It is better to travel abroad to visit different countries when you are younger rather than when you are older?
Nowadays, the demand for traveling abroad has been growing exponentially. Whether to travel abroad when one is still young or older; that is the question. Personally speaking, I take the view that it is much better to visit different countries when we are older even though some take issue with this point of view. I will elaborate upon the momentous reasons in the following paragraphs.
First, the old enjoy from monumental amount of free time which can be used for visiting different countries. It is common knowledge that a great many people quiet working after age sixty-five; it goes without saying that retirement provide a plenty of time for the old which can be filled by travelling. To pave the way for this example, I would like to talk about my grandfather’s experience. When he stopped working, he had a plenty of time and he spent most of his time at home. Having substantial amount of free time he decided to visit the most famous countries all around the world. I can remember that he told me he had enjoyed his trips a lot since his mind has not been occupied with different concerns. In contrast, whenever I travel abroad, my mind is always obsession with a diverse range of issues such as upcoming exams, university fees, and my job, to name but a few. Therefore, having plenty of leisure time, the old can have delight full experience during traveling.
Second, the old has much more money than the young for allocating to travel abroad. It is my firm conviction that young people who have to study in university for doing a degree and taking several classes out of university for improving their skill are not able to afford high expense of traveling abroad. However, when people are older, they do expenses significantly reduce. The less expenses one have, the more money one can allocate to traveling abroad. As I said before, my grandfather started traveling a lot after his retirement. Not only had he had a sharp decrease in his expenses, but also could he dint to his saving. In contrast, even though I am a freelancer and I am working in several companies at the same time, it is hard for me to make a living owing to my high expenses. In a word, the expenses of traveling abroad is much more affordable when people have less expenses and more saving. When human kinds have less expenses and more saving? Is not it when anybody is older?
In the final analysis, according to above-mentioned points and examples, I strongly assert that the best time for traveling abroad is when a person is old since at this time he has plenty of time which he does not know how to fill. Besides, a great many old people have less expenses and more saving which are too essential elements for planning a trip. Then, why not accept this fact that it is lucrative a decision to travel during aging.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion: fewer
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Suggestion: fewer
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Suggestion: fewer
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Message: Did you mean 'fewer'? The noun expenses is countable.
Suggestion: fewer
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, but, first, however, if, second, so, still, then, therefore, in contrast, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 21.0 15.1003584229 139% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 9.8082437276 82% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 13.8261648746 80% => OK
Relative clauses : 21.0 11.0286738351 190% => OK
Pronoun: 55.0 43.0788530466 128% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 57.0 52.1666666667 109% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2319.0 1977.66487455 117% => OK
No of words: 499.0 407.700716846 122% => OK
Chars per words: 4.64729458918 4.8611393121 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.72634191566 4.48103885553 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.62031232539 2.67179642975 98% => OK
Unique words: 242.0 212.727598566 114% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.48496993988 0.524837075471 92% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 738.9 618.680645161 119% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 14.0 9.59856630824 146% => OK
Article: 8.0 3.08781362007 259% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 6.0 3.51792114695 171% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 25.0 20.6003584229 121% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 49.7682629795 48.9658058833 102% => OK
Chars per sentence: 92.76 100.406767564 92% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.96 20.6045352989 97% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.84 5.45110844103 70% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 10.0 4.88709677419 205% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.167972431671 0.236089414692 71% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0623695415231 0.076458572812 82% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0625716622406 0.0737576698707 85% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.124194389555 0.150856017488 82% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0690070406773 0.0645574589148 107% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.5 11.7677419355 89% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 60.65 58.1214874552 104% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 10.1575268817 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.69 10.9000537634 89% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.55 8.01818996416 94% => OK
difficult_words: 94.0 86.8835125448 108% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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