Do you agree or disagree with that it is necessary to ask other people about your decision. Give specific reason to support your view.
Life is about choices. Making a decision plays an essential part in people's lives. Some people believe that a person's choice is something personal. In contrary, others disagree. As far as I am concerned, in certain circumstances we need to share others' perspectives. Perhaps we lack experience, also to avoid negative consequences, and two heads are always better than one. Following are a brief explanation of my point of view.
First of all, our life looks easier than our grandparents. Our generation does not need the help or care from their relatives. We can live independent, and the technology around us provides an ultimate support. However, the experience is necessary for guides. Because not everything we learn published in books or websites. Take an example, an eighteen years old young adult graduated from high school and willing to apply for a university program. No doubt, he/she can not do that alone. Parents' advice and experience are needed. Since college's life is not an easy thing. In fact, this is the first time for those kids to live away from their parents' houses. They might need to work and regulate their schedule, also living the dormitory life is not always nice.
Second, in some cases, it is mandatory to share your plan or your thinking with the people around you. Especially, when your decision is not for yourself. It is part of your responsibility to ask and share the idea with them to avoid any dangerous circumstances. For example, when my husband applied for an immigration visa to the USA for our family. He discussed everything with his parent and me. Of course, change the country means to change your life forever. It is not an easy thing to quit your job, transfer your kids to another culture which speaks the different language, or even take a risk of being jobless. His responsibility forced him to share that fundamental decision.
Finally, people says that two heads are always better than one. Again, we have to ask others' point of view about our idea. They can clear the fog and shadow from our decision. For instance, if a person wants to apply for a job. He needs to ask his parent and an individual who works in that position. There are many pros and cons would be clear for him/her.
All in all, I agree to share other people the idea before taking the final decision. We still need some experience people to highlight our plan. Also, our responsibility forces us to share our perspectives to avoid the danger of wrong consequences. And, many people's idea is better than one.
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Essay evaluation report
flaws:
Avg. Sentence Length: 12.222 21.0 //More compound or complex sentences/clauses wanted.
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 24 in 30
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 36 15
No. of Words: 440 350
No. of Characters: 2032 1500
No. of Different Words: 235 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.58 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.618 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.553 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 125 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 85 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 64 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 40 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 12.222 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 5.045 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.361 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.234 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.397 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.107 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 156, Rule ID: NOUN_AROUND_IT[1]
Message: Consider using 'the surrounding technology'?
Suggestion: the surrounding technology
...relatives. We can live independent, and the technology around us provides an ultimate support. However, ...
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Line 2, column 531, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “Since” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...rents advice and experience are needed. Since colleges life is not an easy thing. In ...
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Line 3, column 62, Rule ID: YOUR[1]
Message: Did you mean 'you're' or 'you are'?
Suggestion: you're; you are
..., it is mandatory to share your plan or your thinking with the people around you. Es...
^^^^
Line 3, column 81, Rule ID: NOUN_AROUND_IT[1]
Message: Consider using 'the surrounding people'?
Suggestion: the surrounding people
...o share your plan or your thinking with the people around you. Especially, when your decision is not ...
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Discourse Markers used:
['also', 'finally', 'first', 'however', 'if', 'look', 'second', 'so', 'still', 'for example', 'for instance', 'in fact', 'no doubt', 'of course', 'first of all', 'in some cases']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.236947791165 0.229887763892 103% => OK
Verbs: 0.146586345382 0.158761421928 92% => OK
Adjectives: 0.070281124498 0.0866891130778 81% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0522088353414 0.046263068375 113% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0923694779116 0.0685040099705 135% => OK
Prepositions: 0.0983935742972 0.118717715034 83% => OK
Participles: 0.0180722891566 0.0351676179071 51% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.66944872705 2.67179642975 100% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0401606425703 0.0309702414327 130% => OK
Particles: 0.0 0.00188951952338 0% => OK
Determiners: 0.0823293172691 0.0887237588012 93% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0100401606426 0.0209618222197 48% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.00803212851406 0.0139019557991 58% => OK
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 2533.0 2387.08602151 106% => OK
No of words: 438.0 408.028673835 107% => OK
Chars per words: 5.78310502283 5.86048508987 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.57476223824 4.48200974243 102% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.303652968037 0.338922669872 90% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.2100456621 0.251872472559 83% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.162100456621 0.174417080927 93% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.116438356164 0.112833075102 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.66944872705 2.67179642975 100% => OK
Unique words: 231.0 212.727598566 109% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.527397260274 0.524397521467 101% => OK
Word variations: 60.8105504276 59.2087087015 103% => OK
How many sentences: 36.0 20.6684587814 174% => OK
Sentence length: 12.1666666667 20.5533526081 59% => OK
Sentence length SD: 27.7449806383 48.84282405 57% => OK
Chars per sentence: 70.3611111111 120.699889404 58% => OK
Words per sentence: 12.1666666667 20.5533526081 59% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.444444444444 0.644075263715 69% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.5376344086 110% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.54480286738 72% => OK
Readability: 33.1712328767 45.7405998639 73% => OK
Elegance: 1.21379310345 1.45489161554 83% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.325228072836 0.300154397459 108% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.0481947557546 0.103427244359 47% => Sentence sentence coherence is low.
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0530065823204 0.0752933317313 70% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.366778697519 0.497263757937 74% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.118264178813 0.151897553556 78% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0843500175057 0.114077575197 74% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0734998531631 0.0781384742642 94% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.264575468738 0.336927656856 79% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0427317796232 0.067059652881 64% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.190803153323 0.210909579961 90% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0909378279485 0.0618886996521 147% => OK
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8870967742 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 9.0 3.86379928315 233% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 15.0 4.91756272401 305% => Less neutral sentences wanted.
Positive topic words: 11.0 8.42114695341 131% => OK
Negative topic words: 4.0 2.4623655914 162% => OK
Neutral topic words: 9.0 2.75985663082 326% => OK
Total topic words: 24.0 13.6433691756 176% => OK
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Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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