Do you agree or disagree? People gain more happiness from their jobs than their social life.
Nowadays people examine different things to find some thing make them happier. No one can cast a shadow of doubt on the fact that there are a lot of significant factors for being happy such as family, a good job, a high position in a society, and etc. Not all people concur when this issue arises. Being cognizant to the logic behind those who endorse or repudiate the legitimacy of this contention, not having ay biased perception, I presume that a top position in the job could make people feel happy. It is more important on this issue than their social life. Among a plentitude of reason in support of this assertion, spending a lot of time of our life in the work and the impact of job promotion on our life could be picked out for further analysis.
To commence with, a consensus has yet to be reached; however, regarding the contacting time of people in their job, based upon of the statistics of different general questionnaires of many companies, worker are unanimous about the conviction that events and activities in their job take precedence over all other parts of their life. To elucidate on, if they could not enjoy their work, they lose most of their precious life without any notable gain. Furthermore, they have communication with different coworkers as their friend and spend a lot of time. This could help them improving their relationship and leave of a formal relation toward a friendship. Thus, they talk to each other about their life stuff and daily news and share their idea. Indeed, they influence each other by sharing their ideas and feelings. For example, my best friend is my assistance in my job, because we talk to each other during the working time and experience some bad or good things with each other. If I was happy, he felt happy and on the other hand, my sad state made him sad.
In addition to the above reason raised above; improving in our career as a good event could also substantiate the justifiability of the claim made at the outset of this essay. In conjunction with public belief, their success in their job such as promotion inject them a good sense of happiness. To delineate, they stimulate to working hard for better position, because it make possible for them to earn much more money. This money as a financial progress is important for them. A famous Persian proverb says that ‘’The power and money are symbol of success ’’. A vivid example can be shed light on what was elaborated above. The results of a study carried out by Rice university’ graduate students revealed that people in high grade job are more happy than low-grade jobs. This result related to the amount of money they earn which is important to obtain desires.
Drawing upon the above reason, discreetly put, as far as my personal perspective on the topic is concerned, I reiterate that job are more important than social life for people who want to be happy. Not only they spend a lot of their life in the job but also they could improve their life by job promotion
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Did you mean 'something'?
Suggestion: something
...people examine different things to find some thing make them happier. No one can cast a sh...
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Message: Use simply 'etc.'.
Suggestion: etc.
...good job, a high position in a society, and etc. Not all people concur when this issue a...
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Line 3, column 576, Rule ID: ADVISE_VBG[9]
Message: The verb 'help' is used with infinitive: 'to improve' or 'improve'.
Suggestion: to improve; improve
...end a lot of time. This could help them improving their relationship and leave of a forma...
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Line 5, column 373, Rule ID: IT_VBZ[1]
Message: Did you mean 'makes'?
Suggestion: makes
...ng hard for better position, because it make possible for them to earn much more mon...
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Line 5, column 435, Rule ID: A_UNCOUNTABLE[3]
Message: Uncountable nouns are usually not used with an indefinite article. Use simply 'financial progress'.
Suggestion: financial progress
... to earn much more money. This money as a financial progress is important for them. A famous Persian...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, furthermore, however, if, regarding, so, thus, for example, in addition, such as, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 15.1003584229 119% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 9.8082437276 82% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 13.8261648746 108% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.0286738351 91% => OK
Pronoun: 60.0 43.0788530466 139% => OK
Preposition: 81.0 52.1666666667 155% => OK
Nominalization: 19.0 8.0752688172 235% => Less nominalization wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2496.0 1977.66487455 126% => OK
No of words: 530.0 407.700716846 130% => OK
Chars per words: 4.70943396226 4.8611393121 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.79809637944 4.48103885553 107% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.60650390074 2.67179642975 98% => OK
Unique words: 266.0 212.727598566 125% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.501886792453 0.524837075471 96% => OK
syllable_count: 789.3 618.680645161 128% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 15.0 9.59856630824 156% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.994623655914 0% => OK
Article: 7.0 3.08781362007 227% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 24.0 20.6003584229 117% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.1344086022 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 63.7671545547 48.9658058833 130% => OK
Chars per sentence: 104.0 100.406767564 104% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.0833333333 20.6045352989 107% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.58333333333 5.45110844103 84% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.5376344086 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 21.0 11.8709677419 177% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.314322076233 0.236089414692 133% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0961237683914 0.076458572812 126% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0944469297649 0.0737576698707 128% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.217189897627 0.150856017488 144% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0704765902103 0.0645574589148 109% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.8 11.7677419355 100% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 57.61 58.1214874552 99% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 10.1575268817 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.04 10.9000537634 92% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.21 8.01818996416 102% => OK
difficult_words: 117.0 86.8835125448 135% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.002688172 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.0537634409 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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