Do you agree or disagree: People who spend more than an hour a day on social media are less happy than those who spend less time on social media.
Although some may believe that social networks bring just benefit to our life, I strongly agree with the statement. Spending a long time on social media does not improve one's happiness. My views are based on personal and social grounds, and in the subsequent paragraphs, I will support my major reasons with examples.
First of all, a day has just 24 hours and not a minute more, and because of that, it is necessary to plan and organize all important activities. Our time is limited, and we need to find a compromise between our work and social life, so we can fulfil our needs. Even though many times it is tempting to just sit in a comfortable chair and scroll through the newest posts, it actually does not relax us as we think it does. Furthermore, if we waste our time on our phones, we reduce the time we have for more meaningful activities, such as deep conversations with loved ones, exercising, and reading. My personal experience demonstrates the importance of using time wisely. Due to past trauma, I, unfortunately, developed depression at a young age, and it took me years to heal and to be happy. One of the things my beloved therapist recommended to me was to delete all social media I had installed. At first, I struggled because I used to spend an hour or two per day scrolling, but I managed to replace it with more productive activities. After some time, I noticed a significant improvement in my mood and a decrease in depressing feelings. It is possible that if I had not experienced this, I would have had a different attitude towards this topic.
From a social standpoint, social platforms are full of fake and unrealistic standards, which is impacting all of us in a negative way. According to the studies, people who spend hours on social media have, on average higher chance of developing depression and anxiety. Moreover, recently published statistics show that the young generation suffers more from food intake disorders, and that has a direct link with beauty standards presented online. For instance, my young cousin was a big fan of influencers showing their diets and lifestyle online, and because of that, she became obsessed with her appearance. It was not until she reached adulthood that she realized that what she was seeing was not real life.
In this essay, I discussed my beliefs that spending hours on social media is not the best choice. I feel this way not just because it reduces the time we can spend in more meaningful ways but also because it has a negative impact on mental health.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, but, first, furthermore, if, may, moreover, so, as to, for instance, i feel, such as, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 15.1003584229 93% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 9.8082437276 61% => OK
Conjunction : 20.0 13.8261648746 145% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.0286738351 100% => OK
Pronoun: 64.0 43.0788530466 149% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 50.0 52.1666666667 96% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2103.0 1977.66487455 106% => OK
No of words: 442.0 407.700716846 108% => OK
Chars per words: 4.75791855204 4.8611393121 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.58517132086 4.48103885553 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.76155388303 2.67179642975 103% => OK
Unique words: 245.0 212.727598566 115% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.554298642534 0.524837075471 106% => OK
syllable_count: 661.5 618.680645161 107% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 17.0 9.59856630824 177% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 8.0 1.86738351254 428% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6003584229 97% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.1344086022 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 30.1504145908 48.9658058833 62% => OK
Chars per sentence: 105.15 100.406767564 105% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.1 20.6045352989 107% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.7 5.45110844103 105% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 9.0 3.85842293907 233% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.230122596299 0.236089414692 97% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0756987924285 0.076458572812 99% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0811027234711 0.0737576698707 110% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.154478124882 0.150856017488 102% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0219299618065 0.0645574589148 34% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.0 11.7677419355 102% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 57.61 58.1214874552 99% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 10.1575268817 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.33 10.9000537634 95% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.66 8.01818996416 108% => OK
difficult_words: 110.0 86.8835125448 127% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.002688172 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.0537634409 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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