Do you agree or disagree whit the following statement? Games are as important for adults as they are for children
One of the more common purposes in life is to reach happiness. Moreover, plenty of people in this moment are wondering whether they are happy or not. Despite happiness, it is not restricted to young or older people, there are moments in life where we want to enjoy real happiness, which in my opinion is when we get older. Furthermore, even though young people could enjoy their life, they still do not know what real happiness is, because they need more experience, they need to live the present and enjoy the simplest things that life has.
Firstly, experience is necessary to enjoy life. Whatever the meaning of the word experience, it related with mistakes, the more experience we have, the more mistakes we have made. This has the utmost importance because it teach us that problems usually get fixed, that compounds will heal, and this knowledge will help us to being calm when problems arise. For example, when my first son got fever I remember I was very sad, years later when the same thing happens to my youngest child, I was no so worry because of the experiences gained.
Secondly, the only thing that really exist is present. When you are young, we usually look forward for plans, ideas to be developed, however, when things go wrong with those ideas we cannot enjoy the present because we are obsess thinking about future. When we are a bit older, we learn that the present is the main source of happiness and que should not waste so much time thinking in tomorrow. for example, when i was an under degree student, I used to think too much about my professional future, but now I realize that I should have been more involve in enjoying that time than being concern about future.
Finally, life is full of simple’s moment. Young people do not pay attention to the daily things that make our life better, moment that we can enjoy without paying anything, such as a conversation with your kids or wife, a bycicle ride or just view the landscape. older people are more aware of this moment and they realize that enjoy life means enjoy this tinny moment everyday.in summary, everybody has the chance of enjoy life, however, in my opinion the older people has enough experience to enjoy the present more than the future, and the clarity to understand that is compounded of several tinny moments
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, finally, first, firstly, furthermore, however, if, look, moreover, really, second, secondly, so, still, as to, for example, in summary, such as, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 23.0 15.1003584229 152% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 9.8082437276 92% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 13.8261648746 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 21.0 11.0286738351 190% => OK
Pronoun: 53.0 43.0788530466 123% => OK
Preposition: 38.0 52.1666666667 73% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.0752688172 99% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1909.0 1977.66487455 97% => OK
No of words: 405.0 407.700716846 99% => OK
Chars per words: 4.71358024691 4.8611393121 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.48604634366 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.37893770665 2.67179642975 89% => OK
Unique words: 208.0 212.727598566 98% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.513580246914 0.524837075471 98% => OK
syllable_count: 600.3 618.680645161 97% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.59856630824 104% => OK
Interrogative: 5.0 0.994623655914 503% => Less interrogative sentences wanted.
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 7.0 3.51792114695 199% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 20.6003584229 73% => OK
Sentence length: 27.0 20.1344086022 134% => OK
Sentence length SD: 81.1732303985 48.9658058833 166% => OK
Chars per sentence: 127.266666667 100.406767564 127% => OK
Words per sentence: 27.0 20.6045352989 131% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.8666666667 5.45110844103 199% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 8.0 5.5376344086 144% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0698698958956 0.236089414692 30% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0231930460465 0.076458572812 30% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0269563904206 0.0737576698707 37% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.044791297646 0.150856017488 30% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0151538196909 0.0645574589148 23% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.3 11.7677419355 122% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 52.53 58.1214874552 90% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.6 10.1575268817 124% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.33 10.9000537634 95% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.74 8.01818996416 97% => OK
difficult_words: 71.0 86.8835125448 82% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 10.002688172 90% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.8 10.0537634409 127% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.247311828 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 3.33333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 30
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