Do you think the students should spend more time learning technology or music and art?
From my perspective, students should spend more time on learning technology or music and art because it could help to develop their skills in social networking which has benefits to their career development. The reasons will be demonstrated as follows:
To begin with, nowadays, a lot of students commonly lack of aesthetic sense, which they are often too focus on their subjects. Therefore, if they learn more common sense of art work, it could strong their knowledge of other than their professional field. Thus, they could show their wide knowledge to impress their coworkers or boss in order to get more attention from them.
Second, technology century has coming, they will need more skills on knowing how to deal with computer issues in their career future. In order to perform better in the work, they should know some skills of fixing technological problems. Consequently, they will have better performance in their works.
Third, music is a part of public culture and it is a sort of social tool in contemporary society. If students want to make friends or have a good relationship with their colleagues in the future, they should know well some kinds of music they are interested in, thus they could have a topic while making friends with others.
In summary, spending more time on learning technology, music and art is beneficial to current students.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
consequently, if, second, so, therefore, third, thus, well, while, in summary, sort of, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 6.0 15.1003584229 40% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 9.8082437276 112% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 13.8261648746 43% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 2.0 11.0286738351 18% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 24.0 43.0788530466 56% => OK
Preposition: 37.0 52.1666666667 71% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.0752688172 37% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1149.0 1977.66487455 58% => More number of characters wanted.
No of words: 227.0 407.700716846 56% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.06167400881 4.8611393121 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.88156143495 4.48103885553 87% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.65649359452 2.67179642975 99% => OK
Unique words: 129.0 212.727598566 61% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.568281938326 0.524837075471 108% => OK
syllable_count: 333.9 618.680645161 54% => syllable counts are too short.
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 9.59856630824 63% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 10.0 20.6003584229 49% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 22.0 20.1344086022 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 49.1218892145 48.9658058833 100% => OK
Chars per sentence: 114.9 100.406767564 114% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.7 20.6045352989 110% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.1 5.45110844103 185% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 11.8709677419 59% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.248794493317 0.236089414692 105% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.117021486039 0.076458572812 153% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.121649103105 0.0737576698707 165% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.18606309823 0.150856017488 123% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.123164274195 0.0645574589148 191% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.8 11.7677419355 117% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 57.61 58.1214874552 99% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 10.1575268817 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.36 10.9000537634 113% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.28 8.01818996416 103% => OK
difficult_words: 51.0 86.8835125448 59% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 10.002688172 135% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.0537634409 107% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.247311828 137% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
More content wanted.
Minimum 250 words wanted.
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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