From the dawn of civilisation to modern times, advices,utterly getting from our olders, played crucial role in each society which considered civilized. In everytime of history, Individual need to ask someone who has experience before they get an important decisions even Kings and Sultans. A controversial question that recently raised about advices which is getting from older people is significant then others because it encompasses others. Some adheres to his idea and believe it. Some others take radically a different standpoint and refutes it. I am with the former idea and lines belows will shed on light myviewpoint.
First of all, the foremost reason is coming my mind is that older people has more experiences then the younger. Thanks to global World,time goes by much faster than ever. Individuals find new invention which makes World more complicated. Everything in the World is changing but one rule is not changing. Parent know best for us because we are bring up by them. So we should ask before we do some important thing for us. For example, I asked my mother before I choose which university study. If I did decision alone I would make wrong decision. Futhermore, there are also other advantageous of getting advice from parents. it is free, you do not need to pay anything,
Secondly, in addition to the importance of having more experience, another imperative reason which deserve some words here is that opportunity. Successful works start with successful relations. Older person have relation with people. When you looks for a job. they help because their relationship. It is without saying that when they give an advice, they are objective. For instance after I graduate from university, I could not find a decent job. It hurt me since I was economically depend on my family. My father sent my cv to one of his friend and I found my current job.
In conclusion, there are numerous reasons which can be persuasive enought to corroborate my view. Having analyzed the reasons above , one can conclude getting advice from olders is better than younger. I highly recommend that the young should pay attention and listen older. There are many advises which we get from them.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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...experience before they get an important decisions even Kings and Sultans. A controversial...
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... that older people has more experiences then the younger. Thanks to global World,tim...
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...then the younger. Thanks to global World,time goes by much faster than ever. Individu...
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Suggestion: invention
...much faster than ever. Individuals find new invention which makes World more complicated. Eve...
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Suggestion: brought
... Parent know best for us because we are bring up by them. So we should ask before we ...
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...before I choose which university study. If I did decision alone I would make wrong...
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... view. Having analyzed the reasons above , one can conclude getting advice from ol...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, look, second, secondly, so, then, for example, for instance, in addition, in conclusion, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 15.1003584229 113% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 9.8082437276 92% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 13.8261648746 51% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 15.0 11.0286738351 136% => OK
Pronoun: 47.0 43.0788530466 109% => OK
Preposition: 41.0 52.1666666667 79% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.0752688172 124% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1834.0 1977.66487455 93% => OK
No of words: 366.0 407.700716846 90% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.01092896175 4.8611393121 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.37391431897 4.48103885553 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.75944724036 2.67179642975 103% => OK
Unique words: 225.0 212.727598566 106% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.614754098361 0.524837075471 117% => OK
syllable_count: 585.0 618.680645161 95% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.59856630824 115% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 28.0 20.6003584229 136% => OK
Sentence length: 13.0 20.1344086022 65% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 38.549464646 48.9658058833 79% => OK
Chars per sentence: 65.5 100.406767564 65% => OK
Words per sentence: 13.0714285714 20.6045352989 63% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.39285714286 5.45110844103 81% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 13.0 5.5376344086 235% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 14.0 4.88709677419 286% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.25469280281 0.236089414692 108% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0553306514708 0.076458572812 72% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.075509077569 0.0737576698707 102% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.154974409961 0.150856017488 103% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0591314863008 0.0645574589148 92% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 8.7 11.7677419355 74% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 58.28 58.1214874552 100% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.4 10.1575268817 83% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.89 10.9000537634 100% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.38 8.01818996416 105% => OK
difficult_words: 95.0 86.8835125448 109% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 10.002688172 90% => OK
gunning_fog: 7.2 10.0537634409 72% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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