I could never forget the astonishment I got when I watched the 2008 Beijing Olympics Game on TV. Although I didn't enjoy the performance live, I still feel the charm of the Athletics. Taller, faster, Higher. The slogan inspired millions of audiences, including me, an 8-year-old girl. I was so proud of the worldwide athletes and was grateful for the organizer, which was my motherland. I knew it cost a lot of money later, but I maintain that the Game was worth it. From then on, I fell for athletics and practiced sports every week, such as badminton and table tennis. I am not talented at sports, so I don't become a professional athlete. However, I have become more healthy, confident, and persistent.
That is one of the reasons I advocate that a country should invest more money in support of athletics than art - it is an activity for all human beings with lifelong influence. The spirit of athletics benefits everyone, helping to build up good well-being. As a result, the citizens will be in a better situation which may lead to a higher happiness index and lower medical insurance costs.
It does not mean that arts are not necessary. But, art pieces can hardly make ordinary people and children so excited and obsessed. The ability to admire art has some thresholds, such as life experience and knowledge. By comparison, athletics is more intuitive and influential.
What is more, athletics is more costly and in need of revenue and apparatus, so it needs the government's support. An art lover can practice with pencils and paper, but a sports lover can not practice without a playground. Without the support of the nation, athletics has no way to develop.
In conclusion, I hold the belief that governments should invest more money in athletics than in the arts.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, however, if, may, so, still, then, well, in conclusion, such as, as a result, what is more
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 15.1003584229 79% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 9.8082437276 92% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 13.8261648746 101% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.0286738351 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 26.0 43.0788530466 60% => OK
Preposition: 29.0 52.1666666667 56% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1479.0 1977.66487455 75% => OK
No of words: 305.0 407.700716846 75% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.84918032787 4.8611393121 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.17902490978 4.48103885553 93% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.79725008834 2.67179642975 105% => OK
Unique words: 183.0 212.727598566 86% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.6 0.524837075471 114% => OK
syllable_count: 453.6 618.680645161 73% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.59856630824 104% => OK
Article: 6.0 3.08781362007 194% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6003584229 97% => OK
Sentence length: 15.0 20.1344086022 74% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 31.7576368768 48.9658058833 65% => OK
Chars per sentence: 73.95 100.406767564 74% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.25 20.6045352989 74% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.75 5.45110844103 87% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 11.8709677419 126% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.266210200259 0.236089414692 113% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.06728987498 0.076458572812 88% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0808567003792 0.0737576698707 110% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.153382892176 0.150856017488 102% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0598844395622 0.0645574589148 93% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.0 11.7677419355 76% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 64.71 58.1214874552 111% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.0 10.1575268817 79% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.26 10.9000537634 94% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.42 8.01818996416 105% => OK
difficult_words: 78.0 86.8835125448 90% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 10.002688172 65% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.0 10.0537634409 80% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 68.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 20.5 Out of 30
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