Have enough knowledge in your job in order to achieve success
Nowadays, people want to have the best job with high salary. On the other hand, for finding a good job you should have ability or considerable job experiences therefore have sufficient knowledge in job is the significant factors so as to gain success. From my point of view, if you have suitable knowledge in your career you will earn more money and develop in your job atmosphere as well. My arguments for these points are explained as follows.
First, in most companies, expert employees have higher income than other employees since skillful workers are useful for the company. For example, the best salesperson at clothes shop can increase turnover of shop by his knowledge in how to behave with customer. Consequently, he can receive more money in comparison with another salesperson that does not have enough ability in order to conducts with customers. In addition, if you have considerable knowledge in your vocation, you are able to work to many companies not just in one company hence you can get salary from two or three companies. As a result, you will be capable of obtaining more money.
Second, by the best background in your job you will certainly develop in your job since you know some specific issues or you possess special ability in some fields that others do not have them so you are higher than them. To give an example, you know how to manage projects properly but your colleague does not know as a result you ahead of him. Furthermore, great knowledge in your field allows you to attain high position in your job. To give an instance, if your manager sees that you are obedient and doing your duties well, he will undoubtedly gives you a better position compared to your current position.
All in all, from what I have discussed, these days, most people prefer to have the best job. However, the best job needs perfect knowledge. In my view, if people have notable awareness in their vocation not only can they achieve more money but also they will progress in their job.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 230, Rule ID: SO_AS_TO[1]
Message: Use simply 'to'
Suggestion: to
...ledge in job is the significant factors so as to gain success. From my point of view, if...
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Line 5, column 550, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[1]
Message: The verb 'will' requires the base form of the verb: 'give'
Suggestion: give
...g your duties well, he will undoubtedly gives you a better position compared to your ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, first, furthermore, hence, however, if, second, so, therefore, well, as to, for example, in addition, you know, as a result, in my view, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 15.1003584229 46% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 9.8082437276 102% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 13.8261648746 51% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 3.0 11.0286738351 27% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 46.0 43.0788530466 107% => OK
Preposition: 48.0 52.1666666667 92% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1660.0 1977.66487455 84% => OK
No of words: 348.0 407.700716846 85% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.77011494253 4.8611393121 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.31911543099 4.48103885553 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.51353188075 2.67179642975 94% => OK
Unique words: 180.0 212.727598566 85% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.51724137931 0.524837075471 99% => OK
syllable_count: 522.0 618.680645161 84% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.59856630824 73% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.994623655914 0% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 9.0 4.94265232975 182% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 20.6003584229 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 51.48892478 48.9658058833 105% => OK
Chars per sentence: 103.75 100.406767564 103% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.75 20.6045352989 106% => OK
Discourse Markers: 11.1875 5.45110844103 205% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.35831295698 0.236089414692 152% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.116766956321 0.076458572812 153% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0820687034804 0.0737576698707 111% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.215888484985 0.150856017488 143% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.068565692607 0.0645574589148 106% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.9 11.7677419355 101% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 58.62 58.1214874552 101% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 10.1575268817 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.39 10.9000537634 95% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.17 8.01818996416 102% => OK
difficult_words: 77.0 86.8835125448 89% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 63.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 19.0 Out of 30
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