IELTS Writing Task 2/ IELTS Essay: (I found that topic in my TOEFL iBT preparation book also ! )
You should spend about 40 minutes on this task
It is said that, "Not everything that is learned is contained in books".
Compare and contrast knowledge gained from experience with knowledge gained from books. In your opinion, which source is more important? Why?
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Write at least 250 words
Everything we learn in a book is a basic knowledge that life presents us someday. What is important to considerate is that we might be confronted to that knowledge in real life and that moment only what we have in mind is the technique, the correct strategy to get through it. In other words, the majority of what we learn is forgot in need, as the experience of how to use a washing machine of instance is relevant rather than what we understand learning the how-to-do booklet. What I mean to say is that books and written knowledge bring us a theory or an ideal way of behaving towards someone but I strongly believe that the real experience solely allows us to progress in life. In the following paragraphs I will explain the three reasons for that I consider that statement.
First we all confirm a major aspect of life: all that happends is not predictable. As I said before the book is the theory. One can learn with particular great focus but might be very much baffled of the actual thing in practical life s/he learnt before. I’m just giving here a simple example: what a freshman used to learn in a chemistry book is not always what happened in his practical! Even a simple reaction may differ from a system to another… what the student learn in a physiology theorical course is a small variety of what is actually in every single human being: there is not a precise threshold of blood pressure normality for instance. To be more explicit, experience is the most important part of the gained knowledge in life because that actually confirms whether we learnt in theory is right or not and therefore, in how much percentage is that theory reliable?
To continue, it is also important to understand that all what they learn in books is a must to start with the basics. Books define things, they give us a sort of preview of what exist (or is conjectured i.e in maths or physics). Moreover, just be aware of that: in that essay, even to explain something considered as a statement I use examples: why? Because I want to be understood in the simplest way from the reader. Here my example can be similar to a practical life gained knowledge. The experience to be confronted to this preview is the same as building a proper new viewpoint based on sensible and considerable observation though. In anatomy for example, a med student learns the common and typical structure of the different organs and the system’s organization and functions which is considerable and clearly different of what a surgeon is experiencing in the operation theater! So here they may be a certain amount of previous observations that inspired the authors to draw and write down what is to be but the truth is that everything is not always achieved in terms of knowledge in books. It is a starter but the following race till the finish line of life is our own experience.
Finally there is a very important aspect to be considerate which is that not everything is learnt or achieved because of books. One child might be very poor and have not enough money to go to school and learn English but that child may learn by listening to people’s conversation, by practicing with tourists… I refer to the movie Slumdog Millionaire where the poor guy learns so much general knowledge even being so much illiterate and considerating that he never has been to school! Another great example is the baby. The little buddy learns to speak in an earlier age but s/he can’t even read! This is achieved by practice. To give a last example, I don’t know Japanese. I can’t read a word but I can speak it quite well because of drama and cartoons I have been watching for years.
Altogether I consider that experience gained knowledge is the most important source of learning. Life is much more like a heartbeat… ups and downs make it adventurous, circumstances may change in seconds so we have to be smart enough to stay on our guards and be prepared to stand against any issue of life. Solutions are not all mentioned in books they rather are found by our own choices, decisions and that make our own experience of life. Lastly it all comes to say practice makes us perfect.
Comments
Can anyone else give me a
Can anyone else give me a second correction please ? ( by examination the meaning of words and ideas as well)
Those comments can tell you
Those comments can tell you everything about the essay:
No of words: 744.0 408.028673835 182% => Less content wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.447580645161 0.524397521467 85% => More unique words wanted or less
It means: You only need around 400 words for TOEFL essays in 30 minutes. 744 words are too much.
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Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.214828883835 0.067059652881 320% => No any connections among paragraphs
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 12.0 4.91756272401 244% => Less neutral sentences wanted.
It means: Examples are too much in the essay, and Examples are not so related to each other in paragraphs.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
Everything we learn in a book is a basic...
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Line 3, column 84, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “As” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...: all that happends is not predictable. As I said before the book is the theory. O...
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Line 5, column 88, Rule ID: MUST_HAVE_TO[1]
Message: After 'must', the verb is used without 'to'. Probably, you should use 'must' or 'have to' here.
Suggestion: must; have to
... that all what they learn in books is a must to start with the basics. Books define thi...
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Line 5, column 260, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...hysics. Moreover, just be aware of that: in that essay, even to explain something...
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Line 5, column 350, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “Because” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...red as a statement I use examples: why? Because I want to be understood in the simplest...
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Line 5, column 527, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... The experience to be confronted to this preview is the same as building a proper...
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Line 7, column 1, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Finally,
... line of life is our own experience. Finally there is a very important aspect to be ...
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Line 9, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...oons I have been watching for years. Altogether I consider that experience ga...
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Discourse Markers used:
['actually', 'also', 'but', 'finally', 'first', 'if', 'lastly', 'may', 'moreover', 'second', 'so', 'therefore', 'well', 'for example', 'for instance', 'i mean', 'sort of', 'in other words', 'to start with']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.201219512195 0.229887763892 88% => OK
Verbs: 0.179268292683 0.158761421928 113% => OK
Adjectives: 0.0926829268293 0.0866891130778 107% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0573170731707 0.046263068375 124% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0548780487805 0.0685040099705 80% => OK
Prepositions: 0.112195121951 0.118717715034 95% => OK
Participles: 0.0378048780488 0.0351676179071 107% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.75651268202 2.67179642975 103% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0378048780488 0.0309702414327 122% => OK
Particles: 0.00121951219512 0.00188951952338 65% => OK
Determiners: 0.0975609756098 0.0887237588012 110% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0170731707317 0.0209618222197 81% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.0243902439024 0.0139019557991 175% => OK
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 4243.0 2387.08602151 178% => OK
No of words: 744.0 408.028673835 182% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.70295698925 5.86048508987 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 5.22267779917 4.48200974243 117% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.317204301075 0.338922669872 94% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.247311827957 0.251872472559 98% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.181451612903 0.174417080927 104% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.125 0.112833075102 111% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.75651268202 2.67179642975 103% => OK
Unique words: 333.0 212.727598566 157% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.447580645161 0.524397521467 85% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
Word variations: 57.6266486691 59.2087087015 97% => OK
How many sentences: 32.0 20.6684587814 155% => OK
Sentence length: 23.25 20.5533526081 113% => OK
Sentence length SD: 77.605516627 48.84282405 159% => OK
Chars per sentence: 132.59375 120.699889404 110% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.25 20.5533526081 113% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.59375 0.644075263715 92% => OK
Paragraphs: 6.0 4.5376344086 132% => OK
Language errors: 8.0 5.54480286738 144% => OK
Readability: 47.9811827957 45.7405998639 105% => OK
Elegance: 1.2050209205 1.45489161554 83% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.303654019539 0.300154397459 101% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.0960434201533 0.103427244359 93% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0720634551352 0.0752933317313 96% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.489386625868 0.497263757937 98% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.181899735723 0.151897553556 120% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.12441240192 0.114077575197 109% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0694153313403 0.0781384742642 89% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.407992750935 0.336927656856 121% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.214828883835 0.067059652881 320% => No any connections among paragraphs
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.204057450965 0.210909579961 97% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0641679873961 0.0618886996521 104% => OK
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 17.0 11.8870967742 143% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.86379928315 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 12.0 4.91756272401 244% => Less neutral sentences wanted.
Positive topic words: 15.0 8.42114695341 178% => OK
Negative topic words: 3.0 2.4623655914 122% => OK
Neutral topic words: 7.0 2.75985663082 254% => OK
Total topic words: 25.0 13.6433691756 183% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
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Less content wanted. Write the essay in 30 minutes.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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Note: This is not the final score. The e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.