If you could go back to some time and place in the past when and where would you go

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If you could go back to some time and place in the past, when and where would you go?

Frankly, if I could go back to some time and place in the past, I would definitely go to 20 years ago when I was a six year old girl. I believe that it was my most enjoyable and unforgettable period during my whole life and I will never forget it based on the reasons which will be discussed in the following paragraphs.
First of all, my cute and younger sister was born about 20 years ago. I can remember that moment and I think it was my best experience because I always wanted to have a sister. My father took me to the hospital and when I saw my sister for the first time, I became excited. When my mother came back to the home, I was happy and I was usually taking care of my sister and helping my mother clean her.
In addition, other enjoyable activity during that period was going to school and playing with other children. I can remember that my first teacher was Miss Rezaian. She was very kind to students and she never punished them. After classes, my friends and I were going to the yard and playing a lot. Furthermore, I had no concerns or problems and my biggest challenges were doing homework or passing the final exams successfully.
Last but not least, in my opinion, my childhood was memorable for me because my grandparents were live. We always were going to their homes, talking about various issues with them, making jocks and so forth. They loved me and they were purchasing a lot of toys for me.
Taking all the aforementioned reasons into account, it can be concluded that my childhood was the best time in my life and if I could go back to some time and place to the past, I would go to 20 years ago based on the reasons which I outlined above.

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Average: 8.9 (15 votes)
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 107, Rule ID: ADVERB_WORD_ORDER[4]
Message: The adverb 'always' is usually put after the verb 'were'.
Suggestion: were always
...e because my grandparents were live. We always were going to their homes, talking about var...
^^^^^^^^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, frankly, furthermore, if, so, i think, in addition, talking about, first of all, in my opinion

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 15.1003584229 119% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 9.8082437276 92% => OK
Conjunction : 20.0 13.8261648746 145% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.0286738351 91% => OK
Pronoun: 57.0 43.0788530466 132% => OK
Preposition: 33.0 52.1666666667 63% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 8.0752688172 25% => More nominalization wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1366.0 1977.66487455 69% => OK
No of words: 316.0 407.700716846 78% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.32278481013 4.8611393121 89% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.21620550194 4.48103885553 94% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.43620741183 2.67179642975 91% => OK
Unique words: 157.0 212.727598566 74% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.496835443038 0.524837075471 95% => OK
syllable_count: 423.0 618.680645161 68% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.3 1.51630824373 86% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 16.0 9.59856630824 167% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Interrogative: 1.0 0.994623655914 101% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 20.6003584229 73% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 50.274181578 48.9658058833 103% => OK
Chars per sentence: 91.0666666667 100.406767564 91% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.0666666667 20.6045352989 102% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.06666666667 5.45110844103 130% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.185531572656 0.236089414692 79% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0715246837077 0.076458572812 94% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.122442207983 0.0737576698707 166% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.142841845905 0.150856017488 95% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.118951172209 0.0645574589148 184% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.5 11.7677419355 81% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 75.54 58.1214874552 130% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.9 10.1575268817 78% => Flesch kincaid grade is low.
coleman_liau_index: 7.78 10.9000537634 71% => Coleman_liau_index is low.
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.18 8.01818996416 90% => OK
difficult_words: 50.0 86.8835125448 58% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 13.0 10.002688172 130% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => The average readability is low. Need to improve the language.
What are above readability scores?

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Try to use less pronouns (like 'It, I, They, We, You...') as the subject of a sentence.

Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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