If you could make one important change in a school that you attend, what change would you made?
Upon the question if you could make one important change in a school that you attend, what change would you made, different people have different opinions based on their education, emotion, culture, etc. Some people may think that hiring prominent teachers is a good idea to improve the school but others would like to buy new equipment for the school gym. In my opinion, purchasing new textbooks and computers for the library is an excellent way to improve school. In the following paragraphs, I will try to explain my position more clearly.
First and foremost, students need textbooks, journal articles and other useful sources to learn new materials in a more convenient way. They should get access to the Internet and look for additional information, statistics, figures and so forth. From my point of view, reading extra texts help them increase their knowledge and broaden their horizons. For example, when I was in high school, I had countless difficulties learning some concepts of chemistry and math. So that I got used to going to the library and searching for related texts. This strategy worked for me and I passed my final exams successfully.
In the second place, students can use various programs that are installed on the computer to prepare themselves for lectures. For instance, they can use Power point software to give new information to their classmates. Furthermore, they will go easily online and read electronic books, papers, etc.
Last but not least, students can use computer to communicate with other students and teachers. For example, sometimes their teachers do not have enough information about a particular issue. In these cases, they can send an email to other teachers and ask their questions.
Taking all the aforementioned arguments into account, it can be concluded that buying new textbooks and computers for the library in my school is a great idea. In my point of view, mobilizing our library has a lot of advantages which I outlined above.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Consider using 'email'.
Suggestion: email
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, furthermore, if, look, may, second, so, for example, for instance, in my opinion, in the second place
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 6.0 15.1003584229 40% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 9.8082437276 133% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 13.8261648746 108% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.0286738351 63% => OK
Pronoun: 37.0 43.0788530466 86% => OK
Preposition: 35.0 52.1666666667 67% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.0752688172 99% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1663.0 1977.66487455 84% => OK
No of words: 328.0 407.700716846 80% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.07012195122 4.8611393121 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.25567506705 4.48103885553 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.74563461586 2.67179642975 103% => OK
Unique words: 197.0 212.727598566 93% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.600609756098 0.524837075471 114% => OK
syllable_count: 500.4 618.680645161 81% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Interrogative: 2.0 0.994623655914 201% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6003584229 87% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 33.9533539862 48.9658058833 69% => OK
Chars per sentence: 92.3888888889 100.406767564 92% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.2222222222 20.6045352989 88% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.27777777778 5.45110844103 115% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.88709677419 143% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.176005158141 0.236089414692 75% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0452047977235 0.076458572812 59% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.148590752153 0.0737576698707 201% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0914044683316 0.150856017488 61% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.168031204777 0.0645574589148 260% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.6 11.7677419355 99% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 61.67 58.1214874552 106% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 10.1575268817 90% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.13 10.9000537634 111% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.57 8.01818996416 107% => OK
difficult_words: 84.0 86.8835125448 97% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 10.002688172 90% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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