It is critically important that we pay attention to what our children are watching. Personally, I believe that filtering content targeted to children is a parents' task, and not a legal matter. I feel this way for two reasons that I will explore in the following paragraphs.
First of all, banning advertisements targeted toward young children, means that another types of advertisement will fill that time. This could bring attention to topics that the family is not yet ready to discuss with their kids. My personal experience is a compelling illustration of this. In Brazil, ads directed to children are banned. Last semester, I had to babysit my little cousin, and as he was watching TV, an ad for a mattress designed for pregnant woman came by. After this, my 5 years old cousin started those well-known questions, as "where babies come from?", and this was a topic that his parents were not ready for bringing up so soon.
Furthermore, TV channels that are not exclusive for kids, but had time slot for cartoons for example, lost revenue as a result from this new law forbidding ads for children. With this, fewer channels now have this dedicated space for a younger audience. For instance, growing up in a not really wealthy family, I did not have cable TV and relied on the Kids show on free channels to have some fun. And now, I know for a fact that the show that I used to watch as a kid, with lots of cartoons, stopped airing, because there is no financial support.
In conclusion, I strongly believe that ads targetting younger audiences should be allowed. This is because without these ads, kids are subjected to adult-related ads, that are not in their interest, and also, because children have less options for consuming content.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 4, column 231, Rule ID: FEWER_LESS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'fewer'? The noun options is countable.
Suggestion: fewer
...terest, and also, because children have less options for consuming content.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, furthermore, really, so, well, for example, for instance, i feel, in conclusion, as a result, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 15.1003584229 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 9.8082437276 41% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 13.8261648746 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.0286738351 118% => OK
Pronoun: 41.0 43.0788530466 95% => OK
Preposition: 31.0 52.1666666667 59% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1455.0 1977.66487455 74% => OK
No of words: 302.0 407.700716846 74% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.8178807947 4.8611393121 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.1687104957 4.48103885553 93% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.74445787596 2.67179642975 103% => OK
Unique words: 185.0 212.727598566 87% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.612582781457 0.524837075471 117% => OK
syllable_count: 437.4 618.680645161 71% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 9.59856630824 125% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 6.0 1.86738351254 321% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 20.6003584229 73% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 42.3390547315 48.9658058833 86% => OK
Chars per sentence: 97.0 100.406767564 97% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.1333333333 20.6045352989 98% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.26666666667 5.45110844103 152% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 11.8709677419 42% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.85842293907 181% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0811214559848 0.236089414692 34% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0360564653193 0.076458572812 47% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0500225087299 0.0737576698707 68% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0560536524321 0.150856017488 37% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0271294288806 0.0645574589148 42% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.3 11.7677419355 96% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 68.1 58.1214874552 117% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 10.1575268817 86% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.68 10.9000537634 98% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.55 8.01818996416 107% => OK
difficult_words: 75.0 86.8835125448 86% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 10.002688172 70% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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