It is better to use your own knowledge and experience to solve problem than to ask other people for advise? Do you agree or disagree?
In this modern era which we are living, humans have to overcome many hurdles every day. Opinion are divided as to whether people confront their difficulties only by using their own experiences or by asking help from others. Personally speaking, I take the view that it is much better to ask other people for advice whenever we get into the trouble. I will elaborate upon the momentous reasons in the following paragraphs.
The first point worth mentioning would be that we can come up with the best idea when we consult with others. It is common knowledge that two minds is better than one. Inasmuch as peoples' knowledge and experiences are not equal, we would be able to carefully considerate all aspects of our decisions before making it, especially a tough one. A prime example of my own experience would shade some light on this point. When I wanted to choose my university major, I consulted with my siblings studying in the university at that time. Having consulted with them, I could understood that it is hard to make a living by art, in contrast there are monumental amount of job opportunities for students graduating from low-school. It is a forgeon conclusion that the more people involved in the process of decision making, the better conclusion would be come up at the end. In a word, after asking others help, we are able to make the best decisions.
There is also a more subtle point we must consider. Should we ask other people for advice, we can save time. It goes without saying that some decisions had to be made in the spur of the moment; in other word there is not a plenty of time available. It is my firm conviction that when there is time pressure, we would probably make a wrong decision. In order to avoid any dare consequence, we should consult with others to reduce the possibility of making mistakes. To exemplify, several years ago, while studying in the university, I had a tempting offer for working in a big company. I did not know what to do; even worse, I did not have enough time to send back my response. Fortunately, I could consult with one of my teacher at that time, and he changed my mind. He told me that the company would use you as sweated labor and it is completely waste of time. Hence, had not I consulted with my professor, I would have made a mistake and wasted monumental mount of my time.
In the final analysis, I firmly believe that we should ask others advice since it would be helpful to come up with the best solutions. Besides, it would reduce the possibility of making mistake whenever there is time pressure. Why not accept this fact that consulting is the key to success. I highly recommend ask others advice if you want to come up with much wiser solutions when you face challenges in your life.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 109, Rule ID: WHETHER[6]
Message: Can you shorten this phrase to just 'whether', or rephrase the sentence to avoid "as to"?
Suggestion: whether
... hurdles every day. Opinion are divided as to whether people confront their difficulties only...
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Line 3, column 569, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[1]
Message: The verb 'could' requires the base form of the verb: 'understand'
Suggestion: understand
...me. Having consulted with them, I could understood that it is hard to make a living by art...
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Line 3, column 654, Rule ID: THERE_RE_MANY[3]
Message: Possible agreement error. Did you mean 'amounts'?
Suggestion: amounts
...y art, in contrast there are monumental amount of job opportunities for students gradu...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, first, hence, if, so, while, as to, in contrast
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 22.0 15.1003584229 146% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 18.0 9.8082437276 184% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 13.8261648746 36% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 17.0 11.0286738351 154% => OK
Pronoun: 70.0 43.0788530466 162% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 68.0 52.1666666667 130% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.0752688172 37% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2280.0 1977.66487455 115% => OK
No of words: 496.0 407.700716846 122% => OK
Chars per words: 4.59677419355 4.8611393121 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.71922212354 4.48103885553 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.57954865818 2.67179642975 97% => OK
Unique words: 246.0 212.727598566 116% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.495967741935 0.524837075471 94% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 739.8 618.680645161 120% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 22.0 9.59856630824 229% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.94265232975 162% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 26.0 20.6003584229 126% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 34.267050781 48.9658058833 70% => OK
Chars per sentence: 87.6923076923 100.406767564 87% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.0769230769 20.6045352989 93% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.38461538462 5.45110844103 44% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.85842293907 181% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.88709677419 164% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.181818863475 0.236089414692 77% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0535361438269 0.076458572812 70% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0591864105564 0.0737576698707 80% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.12684044269 0.150856017488 84% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0373324695322 0.0645574589148 58% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.8 11.7677419355 83% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 60.65 58.1214874552 104% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 10.1575268817 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.4 10.9000537634 86% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.76 8.01818996416 97% => OK
difficult_words: 100.0 86.8835125448 115% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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