It has recently been announced that a high school in your community would refuse bad-record students. Do you support or oppose this plan? Why? Use specific reasons and details in your answer.

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It has recently been announced that a high school in your community would refuse bad-record students. Do you support or oppose this plan? Why? Use specific reasons and details in your answer.

In my home country, few decades ago, there was a cutting line named red line which isolate bad graded student from over all result. This was believed it can help students to study harder for their future. However, due to this action, bad students felt guilty and become non-self-confident individual who cannot found what they are good at and who they become in future. But, nowadays, grades are considered privacy, at school no one should not know what they grade are if they are passing the subject. In my opinion, this is the greatest improvement made in decades because it would not have turned off their hopes for live. Therefore, in answering this question, I would definitely disagree with statement that bad-record student refused and announced by community. I have three reason to support my opinion

First of all, before judging students, it is important to think about optimum teaching technique. In world, everyone has different lifestyle, opinion and brain ability to learn something new. Only one technique, would not fit all students. Hence, student are getting bad grades due to bad teaching technique. For example, when I was student, my teacher taught my new language from abc by repeating and interfering boring grammars over and over again. After 6 years of learning English this way, today, I am still not good at it. However, nowadays, this technique is completely changed, from boring technique interesting reading and talking technique easing the way to learn new language in short period.

Secondly, announcing their failure is like erasing their future. The kid might be having a trouble in family or mental sickness for short period. Over these problem, telling everyone how bad he or she is will definitely kick of his desire to study further or even lead to life-time trauma. For instance, my sister who study normal grades but for just in few months her grades gradually decreased. The reason behind this was break down with his best friend. After discussing several hours, she felt much better and continue studied successfully.

Last but not least, when we were kid, we imagine ourselves who we were become when we grow up without thinking about difficulty in life. However, in reality there are hundreds of troubles occurred. But one of the biggest trouble is cutting their academic career just in high school. Refusing them due to their grades will definitely let kids stop learning and improving themselves. Luckily me, never get refused due to my grades. If I refused, I would never become engineer in the biggest company of my home country.

In conclusion, from above reasons I mentioned. I am opposing the idea that discriminating bad-graded students to public.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 360, Rule ID: IN_PAST[1]
Message: Did you mean: 'in the future'?
Suggestion: in the future
...at they are good at and who they become in future. But, nowadays, grades are considered p...
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Line 5, column 152, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'this problem' or 'these problems'?
Suggestion: this problem; these problems
... mental sickness for short period. Over these problem, telling everyone how bad he or she is ...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, hence, however, if, second, secondly, so, still, therefore, for example, for instance, in conclusion, in short, first of all, in my opinion

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 15.1003584229 126% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 9.8082437276 102% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 13.8261648746 108% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.0286738351 91% => OK
Pronoun: 54.0 43.0788530466 125% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 59.0 52.1666666667 113% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2264.0 1977.66487455 114% => OK
No of words: 447.0 407.700716846 110% => OK
Chars per words: 5.06487695749 4.8611393121 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.59808378696 4.48103885553 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.62732224807 2.67179642975 98% => OK
Unique words: 257.0 212.727598566 121% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.574944071588 0.524837075471 110% => OK
syllable_count: 700.2 618.680645161 113% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 13.0 9.59856630824 135% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.51792114695 171% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 13.0 4.94265232975 263% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 27.0 20.6003584229 131% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 20.1344086022 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 37.2289472458 48.9658058833 76% => OK
Chars per sentence: 83.8518518519 100.406767564 84% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.5555555556 20.6045352989 80% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.59259259259 5.45110844103 103% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 14.0 3.85842293907 363% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.131701928878 0.236089414692 56% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0388798234584 0.076458572812 51% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0431009871748 0.0737576698707 58% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0748948264336 0.150856017488 50% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0323507926899 0.0645574589148 50% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.7 11.7677419355 91% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 55.24 58.1214874552 95% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 10.1575268817 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.77 10.9000537634 108% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.25 8.01818996416 103% => OK
difficult_words: 108.0 86.8835125448 124% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.0537634409 84% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 90.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 27.0 Out of 30
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