It has recently been announced that a new movie theater may be built in your neighborhood. Do you support or oppose this plan? Why? Use specific reasons and details to support your answer.
The construction of a new movie theater would have a tremendously positive effect on young people who live in my neighborhood. It could economically and socially benefit the residents. Therefore, I personally would support the opening of the movie theater. There are a few reasons for that.
First of all, the new construction would provide jobs for students. The work in a movie theater does not require to hire a seasoned staff. Not skilled students could work in the theater. College students are the people, who have to pay a significant amount of money for their education. If they have an opportunity to work while studying in a college, they can pay back a part of their student's loans before the graduation. Indeed, after the graduation of the college, the young professionals could contribute the salary they will earn to the purchasing of their houses. Although the students have to spend most of their time on studying, they have to think of the ways of paying back their educational debts in advance. To that end, the building of a new movie theater will create crucial jobs opportunities for the young dwellers of the community.
Secondly, in the movie theater, the youth can gather and socialize. There are not many places to spend a leisure time in a company of friends in my neighborhood. In the movie theater, the students can get together, watch interesting films and then discuss the films together. It will help the young people to communicate with each other and to build a strong friendship. If the young people do not have a place to hang out with their peers, they can become introverted adults, lack of the pivotal communication skills. Although some students like to gather with their friends outside and enjoy the nature, in the winter time, the new movie theater would be a nice warm place to connect. That is why the opening of a new movie theater would help the youth to build a bridge to the connection.
To conclude, if a new movie theater is going to be built in my neighborhood, it would be advantageous for the students who live there. This is because the opening will create a myriad of employment for the young people and will help them to build a friendship with their peers.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 113, Rule ID: ALLOW_TO[1]
Message: Did you mean 'hiring'? Or maybe you should add a pronoun? In active voice, 'require' + 'to' takes an object, usually a pronoun.
Suggestion: hiring
...ork in a movie theater does not require to hire a seasoned staff. Not skilled students ...
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Line 4, column 278, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...to build a friendship with their peers.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, if, second, secondly, so, then, therefore, well, while, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 15.1003584229 60% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 18.0 9.8082437276 184% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 13.8261648746 43% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 6.0 11.0286738351 54% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 25.0 43.0788530466 58% => OK
Preposition: 58.0 52.1666666667 111% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.0752688172 111% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1833.0 1977.66487455 93% => OK
No of words: 386.0 407.700716846 95% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.74870466321 4.8611393121 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.43248042346 4.48103885553 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.73929277957 2.67179642975 103% => OK
Unique words: 170.0 212.727598566 80% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.440414507772 0.524837075471 84% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 549.0 618.680645161 89% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Interrogative: 1.0 0.994623655914 101% => OK
Article: 8.0 3.08781362007 259% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 6.0 3.51792114695 171% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 37.6969657199 48.9658058833 77% => OK
Chars per sentence: 87.2857142857 100.406767564 87% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.380952381 20.6045352989 89% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.80952380952 5.45110844103 70% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.88709677419 143% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.150879656351 0.236089414692 64% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0552055488426 0.076458572812 72% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0541663844372 0.0737576698707 73% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.11608048986 0.150856017488 77% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0423177442195 0.0645574589148 66% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.1 11.7677419355 86% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 70.13 58.1214874552 121% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.9 10.1575268817 78% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.27 10.9000537634 94% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.23 8.01818996416 90% => OK
difficult_words: 66.0 86.8835125448 76% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 5.0 10.002688172 50% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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