It has recently been announced that a new movie theater may be built in your neighborhood. Do you support or oppose this plan? Why? Use specific reasons and details to support your answer.
The construction of a new movie theater could have a tremendously positive effect on young people who live here. The building would benefit the youth financially and socially. Therefore, I personally would support the opening of the new movie theater. There are a few reasons for that.
First of all, the construction could provide jobs for students. The running of a movie theater does not require hiring only a seasoned staff. Not skilled students could work in the theater as well. They could sell tickets or popcorn to the visitors. This will give students a great opportunity to pay back their student`s loans while studying in a college. Nowadays, an education in an institution is very expensive, and after the graduation a college, the new professionals have to spend a few years on paying out the student`s loans. If the students can pay their educational bills during the period of education, they can graduate without a huge financial debt. Although the students have to spend most of their time studying, they also have to think of the ways to pay back the loans in advance. To that end, the construction of a movie theater will contribute to the financial satisfaction of the young dwellers of the community.
Secondly, the movie theater could become a wonderful place for the youth of the neighborhood to socialize. Movie theaters always have cafes or small restaurants inside. This way, the young people could gather in the theater. They could watch films together and after that, enjoy a discussion of the films in the coffee. It will help young adults and teenagers to connect and to build a strong friendship. If the young people communicate with their peers actively, they become socially adept adults. Having great communication skills is pivotal in the modern society in order to excel since these days, all businesses are based on a teamwork. It is true that young people prefer gathering outside and enjoy the nature, however, in the winter time, the movie theater could become a nice warm place to hang out with friends. So, the importance of the movie theater as a place for the youth to connect is obvious.
To conclude, the building of a new movie theater in my neighborhood would be advantageous for college students and teenagers. This is because it will create for them valuable job opportunities and will help the young people to enhance socially.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...young people to enhance socially.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, second, secondly, so, therefore, well, while, first of all, it is true
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 15.1003584229 53% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 18.0 9.8082437276 184% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 13.8261648746 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 11.0286738351 45% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 23.0 43.0788530466 53% => OK
Preposition: 55.0 52.1666666667 105% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 8.0752688172 149% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1998.0 1977.66487455 101% => OK
No of words: 402.0 407.700716846 99% => OK
Chars per words: 4.97014925373 4.8611393121 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.47771567384 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.78514110326 2.67179642975 104% => OK
Unique words: 197.0 212.727598566 93% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.490049751244 0.524837075471 93% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 599.4 618.680645161 97% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.59856630824 115% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.994623655914 0% => OK
Article: 12.0 3.08781362007 389% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 24.0 20.6003584229 117% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 20.1344086022 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 38.7931659216 48.9658058833 79% => OK
Chars per sentence: 83.25 100.406767564 83% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.75 20.6045352989 81% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.20833333333 5.45110844103 77% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 11.8709677419 126% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.88709677419 143% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.126205132665 0.236089414692 53% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0445721822206 0.076458572812 58% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0507922486014 0.0737576698707 69% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0988659326308 0.150856017488 66% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0403966350266 0.0645574589148 63% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.4 11.7677419355 88% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 63.7 58.1214874552 110% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.4 10.1575268817 83% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.25 10.9000537634 103% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.57 8.01818996416 94% => OK
difficult_words: 80.0 86.8835125448 92% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 5.0 10.002688172 50% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.0537634409 84% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 66.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 20.0 Out of 30
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