The effects of working hours always have been a debate among scholars. I firmly believe that working a few days for long hours is more beneficial than other options since it provides employees more time for both their families and their interests.
First of all, when one works three days a week, they have more time dedicating to their family. If somebody works five days per week, he or she would have only two days for their family, which are usually wasted for resting, not the family. Also, when a parent could spend enough time for his or her children to play with them, it is more likely to enjoy their life while appearing in a great spiritual condition on their job. Hence, their productivity will increase, and promotions come after another. For instance, my brother, who has to work full-time in his office, is a proper example of this situation. He becomes so tired that he is always exhausted. He never has time for his kid because he has piles of paper works to do, even in his house. Thus, he usually tells me that he wishes he did not have to work this much to be able to play with his little daughter instead.
In addition, working three days a week enables people to allocate more time for their personal interests. They can use this free time to learn something new or even get a degree in a new field of study. If one works five days per week, when can he or she find a free time to study? Moreover, workers can utilize their open days to have fun and go out with their friends, such as watching a movie or going to concerts. Also, they can improve their well-being by resting enough and exercising. This will lead to an excellent great physical and mental condition in which makes the employee enjoy being alive. For example, my cousin has is a three-day worker. I always see him having fun, which makes me jealous. He goes to movies every week while learning a new skill to broaden his horizon and promotion possibilities for his job. Thus, I think he will flourish in both his personal and career life. Is there anything better than thriving to make one enjoy?
To sum it up, I subscribe to the point that working for a long time and three days a week outweighs that for average work time. That is because it provides more free time for the families and personal amusements of an employee.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 256, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[1]
Message: The pronoun 'she' must be used with a third-person verb: 'finds'.
Suggestion: finds
... five days per week, when can he or she find a free time to study? Moreover, workers...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, hence, if, moreover, so, thus, well, while, as to, for example, for instance, i think, in addition, such as, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 15.1003584229 79% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 9.8082437276 92% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 13.8261648746 101% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.0286738351 118% => OK
Pronoun: 60.0 43.0788530466 139% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 42.0 52.1666666667 81% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1899.0 1977.66487455 96% => OK
No of words: 423.0 407.700716846 104% => OK
Chars per words: 4.48936170213 4.8611393121 92% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.53508145475 4.48103885553 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.30279221147 2.67179642975 86% => OK
Unique words: 212.0 212.727598566 100% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.501182033097 0.524837075471 95% => OK
syllable_count: 589.5 618.680645161 95% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 18.0 9.59856630824 188% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.94265232975 40% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 20.6003584229 112% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 37.0285742624 48.9658058833 76% => OK
Chars per sentence: 82.5652173913 100.406767564 82% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.3913043478 20.6045352989 89% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.82608695652 5.45110844103 107% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.88709677419 164% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.354165265462 0.236089414692 150% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.112576065997 0.076458572812 147% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0988506042861 0.0737576698707 134% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.261469937106 0.150856017488 173% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0285926600586 0.0645574589148 44% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 8.9 11.7677419355 76% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 70.13 58.1214874552 121% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.9 10.1575268817 78% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.76 10.9000537634 80% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.22 8.01818996416 90% => OK
difficult_words: 72.0 86.8835125448 83% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.002688172 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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