Many high level positions in companies are filled by men even though the workforce in many developed countries is more than 50 percent females. Companies should be required to allocate a certain percentage of these positions to women.
Nowadays education and experience became more valuable. Many international trainings are held to develop one's skills. In modern world everyone is equal and have equal chances to study in top universities become more realized and productive, thus research showed despite the fact, that the workforce in developed countries is more than 50 percent female, most of high level positions are filled by men.
The first aspect to consider, people who held high level positions in companies have appropriate knowledge and experience, these people are very skilful and independent. It is not to get high level position when it comes to requirements. Likewise, in many cases jobs are denied based on sex. Research showed, that more than 80 percent of top positions were denied to women. It proves discrimination based on gender.
Another key point to mention is, that companies prefer skilful and devoted staff member over the member that is chosen by gender. However, when opposite genders have same possibilities and experience, companies prefer to chose applicant that is men. Employers sometimes believe,that men are stronger and can multi task while being under stress.
In my opinion, it is more advantageous not to consider gender and make decisions only based on applicant's possibilities. I feel this way for the reasons which I explained in the essay. I will once more say, if person is open minded, is amazingly experienced, has high level of education it does not matter if applicant is woman or man. The decision should be made according to his or her potential. In light of evidence we should conclude, that high level positions are filled by men. Its cause is, that they have pertinent education.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, however, if, likewise, so, thus, while, i feel, in many cases, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 15.1003584229 132% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 9.8082437276 41% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 13.8261648746 80% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.0286738351 109% => OK
Pronoun: 24.0 43.0788530466 56% => OK
Preposition: 32.0 52.1666666667 61% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.0752688172 124% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1432.0 1977.66487455 72% => OK
No of words: 278.0 407.700716846 68% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.15107913669 4.8611393121 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.08329915638 4.48103885553 91% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.81999705975 2.67179642975 106% => OK
Unique words: 167.0 212.727598566 79% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.60071942446 0.524837075471 114% => OK
syllable_count: 459.0 618.680645161 74% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.51630824373 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 13.0 9.59856630824 135% => OK
Interrogative: 1.0 0.994623655914 101% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.6003584229 83% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 16.0 20.1344086022 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 59.1053250255 48.9658058833 121% => OK
Chars per sentence: 84.2352941176 100.406767564 84% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.3529411765 20.6045352989 79% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.88235294118 5.45110844103 90% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 5.5376344086 126% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 11.8709677419 34% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 9.0 4.88709677419 184% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.366725297401 0.236089414692 155% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0910212254931 0.076458572812 119% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0788742168888 0.0737576698707 107% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.197956860313 0.150856017488 131% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0775306464658 0.0645574589148 120% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.0 11.7677419355 93% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 46.78 58.1214874552 80% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 10.1575268817 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.29 10.9000537634 113% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.86 8.01818996416 110% => OK
difficult_words: 78.0 86.8835125448 90% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.0537634409 84% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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