Many people believe that the icreased presence of violence in flms and television thesed ays is resposible for the rising incidents of violent crimes among youth in society. They argue that governments have a duty to control the media so as to reduce this phenomenon.
Do you agree with this argument?
In recent years there has been a rise in violence among young population. Many people believe that it can be connected with the increase of aggressive content shown by the mainstream media. Therefore, some argue that the government should take more control over what is shown on TV. In my opinion, the government is responsible for making people safe and should in fact have control over the TV content. I feel this way for three main reasons, which I will explore in the following essay.
Firstly, it has many times been proven that preventing the damage is much more cost effective than dealing with its effects. Censoring TV programs is less expensive than paying for the hospital bills for consequences of violent acts among young adults. For example, when there is a mass school shooting, victims don’t only suffer from physical consequences, but they also suffer emotionally, for which they need an expensive psychological treatment. Considering what was said before, I think that the government should invest its money in certain measures that forbid or at least censor violent and aggressive content on tv.
Secondly, numerous experiments done by psychologists and sociologists have shown a connection between long-term exposure to violent content and aggressive behavior in the future. In other words, youth that are often spending their time in front of violent news and movies tend to be more aggressive towards their peers. In fact, one study has shown that children that spend more than four hours per week in front of violent content are displaying more aggressive behavior patterns, compared to their peers who only spend less than two hours.
Thirdly, children are the most vulnerable and fragile members of our society and the government has a responsibility to enable them to grow into fully functional and stable adults.
More importantly, children’s brains before reaching adulthood are like a sponge, meaning they will soak all around them and take it as a parameter of their future behavior.
It is important to mention that countries that had censored their TV program have seen a decrease in violent behavior in youth.
It can be concluded that the government should allow censorship over TV programs to prevent violent content being presented, in particular to youth. In my opinion, the reasons why I agree with this statement are: governments’ responsibility for its youth, the benefits of prevention compared to its consequences and finally the numerous experiments showing the positive correlation between aggression in youth and exposure to violence on TV.
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also, but, finally, first, firstly, second, secondly, so, therefore, third, thirdly, at least, for example, i feel, i think, in fact, in particular, in my opinion, in other words
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 15.1003584229 119% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 9.8082437276 92% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 13.8261648746 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 15.0 11.0286738351 136% => OK
Pronoun: 39.0 43.0788530466 91% => OK
Preposition: 54.0 52.1666666667 104% => OK
Nominalization: 14.0 8.0752688172 173% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2206.0 1977.66487455 112% => OK
No of words: 417.0 407.700716846 102% => OK
Chars per words: 5.29016786571 4.8611393121 109% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.5189133491 4.48103885553 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.87729013898 2.67179642975 108% => OK
Unique words: 227.0 212.727598566 107% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.544364508393 0.524837075471 104% => OK
syllable_count: 655.2 618.680645161 106% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 9.59856630824 52% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.6003584229 83% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 24.0 20.1344086022 119% => OK
Sentence length SD: 54.156380001 48.9658058833 111% => OK
Chars per sentence: 129.764705882 100.406767564 129% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.5294117647 20.6045352989 119% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.4705882353 5.45110844103 192% => OK
Paragraphs: 7.0 4.53405017921 154% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 11.8709677419 51% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 10.0 3.85842293907 259% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.196655725061 0.236089414692 83% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0680202317655 0.076458572812 89% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0368122036628 0.0737576698707 50% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0896286073161 0.150856017488 59% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.065825634981 0.0645574589148 102% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.8 11.7677419355 134% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 47.12 58.1214874552 81% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 10.1575268817 125% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.7 10.9000537634 126% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.42 8.01818996416 105% => OK
difficult_words: 95.0 86.8835125448 109% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 10.002688172 75% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.0537634409 115% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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