In order to attract more tourists, the government could either improve safety by hiring more police or improve its appearance by repairing old buildings and streets. Which way do you think is more effective?
No one can cast a shadow of doubt on the fact that visiting other countries is one the most interesting aspect of people life. Governments could acquire a lot of benefits by increasing people who have tendency to see some appealing places. Thus, they attempt to provide the suitable situation for enhancing these world surfing people which are called tourists. Not all people concur when this issue arises. Being cognizant to the logic behind those who repudiate or endorse the legitimacy of this contention, not having any biased perception, I presume that government should improve the facilities of the cities and repairing old buildings for appealing more tourists to their countries. Among a plentitude of reasons in support of this assertion, economic benefits and enhancing the beauty of the country could picked out for further analysis.
To commence with, a consensus has yet to be reached; however, regarding the economy as an essential goal for governments, based upon the statistics of different general questionnaires in sundry countries, people are unanimous about the conviction that government should provide some facility for comforting transportation of people who visited their countries. The most important facilities include proper public transportation and efficient road systems. Tourists are tendency to visit the historical and natural places in the limited time; moreover, they expense a lot of money for visiting these places which it helps the money obtained by governments. Thus, government repair the streets for easy transportation. In addition, this activity could be accounted as a saving money process because finally government should improve their city for making the better life for the settlements of the cities.
In addition to the reason raised above; visiting beautiful and clean old or natural place as a desire for tourists could also substantiate the justifiability the claim made at the outset of this essay. In conjunction with public belief, tourists do not visit some ugly and destroyed place and this issue could cause to reduce the tourist of each city. To elucidate on, old building should repaired for attracting more people. A vivid example can be given to shed light on what was elaborated above. The results of a study carried out by rice university’s graduate students unveiled the fact that Iran has a 50 percent increase in the number of tourist who visited this country each year by devoting 100 million dollars for providing some facilities for people who visit its attractive place.
Drawing upon the above reasons, discreetly put, as far as my personal perspective on the topic is concerned, I reiterate that expense money for improving the streets and building of the specific city by government is more effective for attracting people that employing some police for increase the safety of the city. Improvement the view of city’s places not only helps the economy of the countries but also enhance the beauty of the cities.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, however, if, moreover, regarding, so, thus, in addition
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 15.1003584229 73% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 9.8082437276 112% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 13.8261648746 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 11.0286738351 127% => OK
Pronoun: 26.0 43.0788530466 60% => OK
Preposition: 61.0 52.1666666667 117% => OK
Nominalization: 19.0 8.0752688172 235% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2524.0 1977.66487455 128% => OK
No of words: 479.0 407.700716846 117% => OK
Chars per words: 5.26931106472 4.8611393121 108% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.67825486995 4.48103885553 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.85210768418 2.67179642975 107% => OK
Unique words: 255.0 212.727598566 120% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.53235908142 0.524837075471 101% => OK
syllable_count: 792.9 618.680645161 128% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.51630824373 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 9.59856630824 52% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.994623655914 0% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6003584229 87% => OK
Sentence length: 26.0 20.1344086022 129% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 91.5600895587 48.9658058833 187% => OK
Chars per sentence: 140.222222222 100.406767564 140% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.6111111111 20.6045352989 129% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.16666666667 5.45110844103 76% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.5376344086 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.163573773478 0.236089414692 69% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0585793146314 0.076458572812 77% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0691838930303 0.0737576698707 94% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.11786286316 0.150856017488 78% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0454627844648 0.0645574589148 70% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.7 11.7677419355 142% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 36.63 58.1214874552 63% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.6 10.1575268817 144% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.58 10.9000537634 125% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.24 8.01818996416 115% => OK
difficult_words: 131.0 86.8835125448 151% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.002688172 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 10.0537634409 123% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 80.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 24.0 Out of 30
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