In order to become financially responsible adults, children should learn to manage their own money at a young age.

The statement is discussing about the economical adultness and its fact depends on that statement . it is a very complicated ideas. some peoples will agree with it but others may diagree with that statement. for my case , i disagree with the statement and showing some reasons and facts to strong my conditions.

first of all, children should learn more about how economy goes?. how it can be measurable and manage. they need higher education or general knowledge to pursuit responsible adults insteads of just manage their own money.for instance, if any child can independent from their childhood to potentials for economical facts , that can creat them a GREATER adults for the future.

second, childrens should be interact with the success manager and business man to know how he manage that sort of work and worth. by collecting experience they can know much about the financial management. there are so many people learn from practice it on several place .

trird, the children can develop theirselves by increases their activity with others social and economical organization. by working with that organization , the children can improve their way of thinking about how finance work. by the way, so children can develop by doing intership or work as a volunter , they can develop theirselves as a good financial manager.

however, some children can also slight change by the managing their own money but it is not create any significant change of their goodness as its happends by above facts. the possibility of managing themselves as a good
manager enhance by the above fact.

by way of conclusion. based on the arguments explored above, i am of the
opinion that in most cases helpful not only improve but also easy way.

Votes
Average: 7.3 (1 vote)
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, may, second, so, for instance, sort of, by the way, first of all, in most cases

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 6.0 15.1003584229 40% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 9.8082437276 143% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 13.8261648746 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 11.0286738351 54% => OK
Pronoun: 29.0 43.0788530466 67% => OK
Preposition: 40.0 52.1666666667 77% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 8.0752688172 149% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1472.0 1977.66487455 74% => OK
No of words: 286.0 407.700716846 70% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.14685314685 4.8611393121 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.11236361783 4.48103885553 92% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.72187678786 2.67179642975 102% => OK
Unique words: 161.0 212.727598566 76% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.562937062937 0.524837075471 107% => OK
syllable_count: 447.3 618.680645161 72% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 9.59856630824 63% => OK
Interrogative: 1.0 0.994623655914 101% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.6003584229 83% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 20.1344086022 79% => OK
Sentence length SD: 57.8224821879 48.9658058833 118% => OK
Chars per sentence: 86.5882352941 100.406767564 86% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.8235294118 20.6045352989 82% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.47058823529 5.45110844103 119% => OK
Paragraphs: 8.0 4.53405017921 176% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 37.0 5.5376344086 668% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8709677419 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.85842293907 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.88709677419 164% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.202828795821 0.236089414692 86% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0586529818651 0.076458572812 77% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0598693343359 0.0737576698707 81% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0848248294918 0.150856017488 56% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0748438413136 0.0645574589148 116% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.2 11.7677419355 95% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 55.24 58.1214874552 95% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 10.1575268817 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.29 10.9000537634 113% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.13 8.01818996416 101% => OK
difficult_words: 67.0 86.8835125448 77% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 10.002688172 70% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.0537634409 84% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK

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Maximum five paragraphs wanted.

Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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