In order to become financially responsible adults, children should learn to manage their own money at young age.
Today’s harsh condition of life makes it necessary to organize the expenses and manage income and costs in a logical manner which this idea will be fulfilled during comprehensive learning from the early years of life. While some people hold the opinion that children are better to learn mange their own budget to be an undependable individual, other people disagree. I, personally, believe that kids should get sufficient education to learn how handle their money and afford life's expenses in an economical way. To support my point of view, two significant reasons are being explored in the following paragraphs.
To begin with, learning how to spend and save money from the beginning years of life, children will be able to conquer their future difficulties. Financial abilities are one of the most essential requirements for adults to come up with the expensive life in nowadays cities life which can be satisfied by learning how manage money from childhood. The case in point is that when I was at elementary school, my kind teacher had an ingenious thought which taught us a key strategy to save money. His creative idea was that whenever we got budget, we should save twenty percent of it and we must spend the other eighty percent which this notion helped us to have some invested money which we could spend on our necessities. Therefore, correspondingly to my earlier education, I always save a portion of my income which convince me to spend wisely and avoid buying unimportant objects or services. That's how financial learning from the early years of life can influence adult's life.
Equally important, children by learning how to regulate their money, learn disciplines and rules of investing. At the beginning stages of life, children have a curious mind that is largely receptive. So, learning one skill aids them to develop their mental abilities which lead to reinforcement of mind. In other words, subjecting kids' mind to some new rules and limitations makes them more creative in a way which they searched for new solutions and find the best one. For instance, I have a nine years old little brother who his teacher taught him to save his money sometimes and spend it intelligently. He always asks questions himself about the money, what he can buy, and how he can save a part of it. Consequently, he does same for any problems encountered in his life, math homework for example. When he wants to solve complicated problems he talks with himself and asks some questions to clarify the question and possible answers. If he didn’t aware of saving money methods, he would not be as creative as now he is.
In conclusion, taking account all the aforementioned reasons and examples, learning how to manipulate the earned money is a crucial issue for children from the earlier steps of life. This is because saving money not only helps to always have some saved money which can be accessible in urgent but also it leads to make kids more involved in their life and active their mind to perform intelligently.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Consider replacing "in a logical manner" with adverb for "logical"; eg, "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
...e expenses and manage income and costs in a logical manner which this idea will be fulfilled durin...
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Message: Consider replacing "in an economical way" with adverb for "economical"; eg, "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
... their money and afford lifes expenses in an economical way. To support my point of view, two signi...
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Suggestion: nowadays
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Suggestion: That's
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Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Equally,
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Message: This verb is used with the gerund form: 'mind performing'.
Suggestion: mind performing
...nvolved in their life and active their mind to perform intelligently.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, if, so, therefore, while, for example, for instance, in conclusion, in other words, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 15.1003584229 113% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 9.8082437276 122% => OK
Conjunction : 17.0 13.8261648746 123% => OK
Relative clauses : 17.0 11.0286738351 154% => OK
Pronoun: 54.0 43.0788530466 125% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 65.0 52.1666666667 125% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.0752688172 99% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2639.0 1977.66487455 133% => OK
No of words: 514.0 407.700716846 126% => OK
Chars per words: 5.13424124514 4.8611393121 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.76146701107 4.48103885553 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.91578946225 2.67179642975 109% => OK
Unique words: 280.0 212.727598566 132% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.544747081712 0.524837075471 104% => OK
syllable_count: 789.3 618.680645161 128% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6003584229 87% => OK
Sentence length: 28.0 20.1344086022 139% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 56.5303643962 48.9658058833 115% => OK
Chars per sentence: 146.611111111 100.406767564 146% => OK
Words per sentence: 28.5555555556 20.6045352989 139% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.77777777778 5.45110844103 124% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.5376344086 108% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.188110771175 0.236089414692 80% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0680274152896 0.076458572812 89% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.053423556721 0.0737576698707 72% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.131828619871 0.150856017488 87% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.018959599851 0.0645574589148 29% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.0 11.7677419355 144% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 51.52 58.1214874552 89% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.0 10.1575268817 128% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.77 10.9000537634 117% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.83 8.01818996416 110% => OK
difficult_words: 124.0 86.8835125448 143% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 10.002688172 145% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.2 10.0537634409 131% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.247311828 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 90.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 27.0 Out of 30
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