In the past, young people depended too much on their parents to make decisions for them; today young people are better able to make decisions about their own lives.
Throughout the history young people depended on other people to make decisions. In the past parents always were the first and also accessible ones that youth referred to them to take a strong decisions. Nowadays, even though parents plays an important role in decision making of their children, other sources of knowledge also help the young people to make decisions. In my perspective, I firmly believe that, today young people are better able to make decision about their own lives. In my view access to plenty of information thorough internet helps them to make better decision for two important reasons which I will explain in the following paragraphs.
First, let me imply the role of internet in providing good source of data to make better decision. Most of the time, we are in situation that we need more information to make a decision. With a search in the internet we can access to information on desired subject that helps us to decide better and choose best way. My own experience is a compelling example of this. I remember that after I graduated my high school I didn't know which major should I choose for my university study? Considering that my parents don't have any academic study, they couldn't help me in this issue. So, I spent about one week searching in the internet about different majors and I got a lot of information about their future job status and income that I can get. Finally, based on the information that I got from the internet I chose Chemical engineer as my major in university. Now, after graduation I am happy of this decision. This example clearly illustrates that, today we have access to more data which leads to better decisions.
As the second reason, I want to point out something which is widely accepted. It is now impossible to neglect the effect of social networks on our decisions. Nowadays, majority of us spend a couple of time in social networks. In this networks a lot of people share their experiences and daily events. These data could be a paramount source for our decisions. For example, I witnessed how my brother found an appropriate job using these networks. After his graduation from university he was seeking for a good job. I remember that every day he was in different social networks to get information and also he had opportunity to ask from some people about their jobs. After about two months he started to make his software company. Now, I can say that this was his best decision because of high income of the company.
In sum, even though some people refers to their parents to make decision and it was common in the past, I believe that nowadays we can make better decisions because we have access to many information in internet and a lot of people in social networks.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 101, Rule ID: ADVERB_WORD_ORDER[4]
Message: The adverb 'always' is usually put after the verb 'were'.
Suggestion: were always
... to make decisions. In the past parents always were the first and also accessible ones that...
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Line 1, column 193, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[2]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'decision'?
Suggestion: decision
...youth referred to them to take a strong decisions. Nowadays, even though parents plays an...
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Line 2, column 300, Rule ID: THE_SUPERLATIVE[4]
Message: A determiner is probably missing here: 'choose the best'.
Suggestion: choose the best
...ject that helps us to decide better and choose best way. My own experience is a compelling ...
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Line 2, column 307, Rule ID: AFFORD_VB[1]
Message: This verb is used with the infinitive: 'to best', 'to well'
Suggestion: to best; to well
...at helps us to decide better and choose best way. My own experience is a compelling ...
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Line 2, column 419, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: didn't
...that after I graduated my high school I didnt know which major should I choose for my...
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Line 2, column 511, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: don't
...sity study? Considering that my parents dont have any academic study, they couldnt h...
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Line 2, column 546, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: couldn't
...ents dont have any academic study, they couldnt help me in this issue. So, I spent abou...
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Line 3, column 229, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[1]
Message: Did you mean 'these'?
Suggestion: these
...a couple of time in social networks. In this networks a lot of people share their ex...
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Line 3, column 665, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “After” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
... ask from some people about their jobs. After about two months he started to make his...
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Line 4, column 184, Rule ID: MANY_FEW_UNCOUNTABLE[2]
Message: Use 'much' or 'little' with uncountable nouns.
Suggestion: much; little
...ter decisions because we have access to many information in internet and a lot of pe...
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Line 4, column 184, Rule ID: MANY_NN_U[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun information seems to be uncountable; consider using: 'much information', 'a good deal of information'.
Suggestion: much information; a good deal of information
...ter decisions because we have access to many information in internet and a lot of people in soci...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, finally, first, if, second, so, for example, in my view
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 15.1003584229 73% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 9.8082437276 82% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 13.8261648746 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 16.0 11.0286738351 145% => OK
Pronoun: 75.0 43.0788530466 174% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 78.0 52.1666666667 150% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 8.0752688172 136% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2266.0 1977.66487455 115% => OK
No of words: 480.0 407.700716846 118% => OK
Chars per words: 4.72083333333 4.8611393121 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.68069463864 4.48103885553 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.6148580533 2.67179642975 98% => OK
Unique words: 213.0 212.727598566 100% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.44375 0.524837075471 85% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 726.3 618.680645161 117% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 14.0 9.59856630824 146% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.51792114695 171% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 11.0 4.94265232975 223% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 26.0 20.6003584229 126% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 45.1823393261 48.9658058833 92% => OK
Chars per sentence: 87.1538461538 100.406767564 87% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.4615384615 20.6045352989 90% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.34615384615 5.45110844103 43% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 11.0 5.5376344086 199% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 11.8709677419 126% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 9.0 4.88709677419 184% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.38029771616 0.236089414692 161% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0998264734956 0.076458572812 131% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.131887431512 0.0737576698707 179% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.276679925382 0.150856017488 183% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.178136853237 0.0645574589148 276% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.0 11.7677419355 85% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 61.67 58.1214874552 106% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 10.1575268817 90% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.1 10.9000537634 93% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.0 8.01818996416 87% => OK
difficult_words: 75.0 86.8835125448 86% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.002688172 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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