People benefit more from traveling in their own country than from traveling to foreign countries.
People can benefit by travelling to their own country as well as travelling to other countries as well. But, I am of the of the conviction
that there are more benefits to the people by travelling to foreign country instead of their own country. In this essay, I will try to justify my claim by
providing some examples and also will shed light on the other side of the topic.
First of all, people travel to other countries to learn new things, to learn about other countries culture or they just travel for fun and relaxation.
Whenever I visit some country I want to learn new things and new technological advances and some personal traits that can benefit my country.
In India, we have a serious issue of corruption and dishonesty. This issue is same across every part of India, I don't mean that everyone in India is corrupt, but there are lot
of people who are corrupt. But, if these people get a chance to travel to other countries, like Japan, which is famous for its honesty and respect for human values, may be
lot of people can learn about this trait from Japanese people, which can in turn help India a lot. If Indian people just travel across India, they won't be able to learn
about good things, like honesty, respect for human values etc. from other countries. See, no one is perfect, every civilization and culture has its own qualities,
travelling across foreign countries, will help people to learn new traits and qualities.
Secondly, there are new technological innovation happening across the world, every country has some field of expertize, there is no country in this world, who is doing the all innovation in all the fields.
For example, Israel is famous for its innovation in field of Agriculture, lot of Indian's travel to Israel every year to learn these new techniques and practices so that they can also benefit from these techniques.
Using Israel's agriculture techniques Indian's have been able to increase yielf per hectare, which is helping Indian government and people to feed its huge population.
People can't just learn these things by travelling to their own country. We can also take example of China; lot of MBA students travel to china to learn how China is able to utilize this huge man power for its benefits.
In India, we also have huge population, but in case of India we are unable to learn how to utilize it properly, in case of India it is burden, whereas in case of China it is a boom, Indian people have to visit
China to learn how they are managing this. Indian's can't just learn about this by staying in their own country.
Thirdly, cultural advancement can only happen when different civilization mix and learn from each other. If people are just confined to their own culture, their own country, world will become like a heterogeneous mixture of
different culture, which country having its own culture without having understanding of different cultures and civilization. For cultural advancement to happen, people should travel to other countries and learn other people culture and also spread their own culture.
We can say that, if people travel to other country, then they are just supporting economy of other countries, yes that is true. But, if people visit foreign country then people from foreign country will also visit their country, so that economic effect won't matter much.
Hence, based upon the reason stated above, I think traveling to foreign countries is more beneficial than travelling to own country.
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Discourse Markers used:
['also', 'but', 'first', 'hence', 'if', 'may', 'second', 'secondly', 'so', 'then', 'third', 'thirdly', 'well', 'whereas', 'for example', 'i think', 'as well as', 'first of all']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.241327300151 0.229887763892 105% => OK
Verbs: 0.153846153846 0.158761421928 97% => OK
Adjectives: 0.105580693816 0.0866891130778 122% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0407239819005 0.046263068375 88% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0542986425339 0.0685040099705 79% => OK
Prepositions: 0.119155354449 0.118717715034 100% => OK
Participles: 0.0316742081448 0.0351676179071 90% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.50005635132 2.67179642975 94% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0467571644042 0.0309702414327 151% => OK
Particles: 0.0 0.00188951952338 0% => OK
Determiners: 0.0558069381599 0.0887237588012 63% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0226244343891 0.0209618222197 108% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.0196078431373 0.0139019557991 141% => OK
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 3493.0 2387.08602151 146% => OK
No of words: 595.0 408.028673835 146% => OK
Chars per words: 5.87058823529 5.86048508987 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.93888872473 4.48200974243 110% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.334453781513 0.338922669872 99% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.223529411765 0.251872472559 89% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.146218487395 0.174417080927 84% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.090756302521 0.112833075102 80% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.50005635132 2.67179642975 94% => OK
Unique words: 230.0 212.727598566 108% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.386554621849 0.524397521467 74% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
Word variations: 46.0604799753 59.2087087015 78% => OK
How many sentences: 24.0 20.6684587814 116% => OK
Sentence length: 24.7916666667 20.5533526081 121% => OK
Sentence length SD: 57.1394493031 48.84282405 117% => OK
Chars per sentence: 145.541666667 120.699889404 121% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.7916666667 20.5533526081 121% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.75 0.644075263715 116% => OK
Paragraphs: 20.0 4.5376344086 441% => There are something wrong with the essay format.
Language errors: 8.0 5.54480286738 144% => OK
Readability: 47.1446078431 45.7405998639 103% => OK
Elegance: 1.57575757576 1.45489161554 108% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.348178045848 0.300154397459 116% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.166584506224 0.103427244359 161% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.104521076996 0.0752933317313 139% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.734983549564 0.497263757937 148% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.216805739851 0.151897553556 143% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.133723522042 0.114077575197 117% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0780796873966 0.0781384742642 100% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.162474257054 0.336927656856 48% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0980853409528 0.067059652881 146% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.138086324173 0.210909579961 65% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.07672817308 0.0618886996521 124% => OK
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 11.8870967742 118% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.86379928315 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.91756272401 142% => OK
Positive topic words: 14.0 8.42114695341 166% => OK
Negative topic words: 2.0 2.4623655914 81% => OK
Neutral topic words: 5.0 2.75985663082 181% => OK
Total topic words: 21.0 13.6433691756 154% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
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Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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