People should buy goods from their internal products
Nowadays, we witness many kinds of products that are sold ((فروخته میشوند in lots of stores. Some products have produced in our country but some of them may import from other countries. In this way, some people would rather buy internal goods while others prefer to use foreign products. From my point of view, if people buy products from their countries products, would be better for them since they will spend their money in the best way and that is the kind of contribution to the society as well. My arguments for these points are explained as follows.
First, if you purchase the products that have produced in your country, you are able to save your money because most of these products are cheaper than foreign products. For example, if you want to buy a shampoo, foreign shampoo maybe is hundred dollars but a shampoo from your company is about fifty dollars so it will be cost-effective for you to use internal products. In addition, foreign products usually do not have the best quality as a result if you buy it you just wasted your money since internal goods have better quality in comparison with foreign products. To give an example, if you living in the United States you can see lots of stores that sale Chinese products. If you go to shop and buy a Chinese T-shirt, after a while you can see that the color of the T-shirt has changed after washing due to the fact that most of the Chinese commodities do not have sufficient quality.
Second, you can help to your society if you purchase from your countries products because you can motive internal producer to produce more products. In other words, they will be encouraged to continue their works when they see that people are not reluctant to buy their products. Furthermore, many manufactures try to work hard in order to increase their products. Therefore, they may hire a lot of labors so as to produce plenty of goods quickly. As a result, the unemployment rate will reduce in your country.
All in all, from what I have discussed, these days, there are lots of stores around us that most of them have foreign products and internal goods. Some people like to buy products that are imported to their countries but others prefer to purchase internal products. In my opinion, if people use their internal commodities, would be beneficial for them because not only can they spend their money properly but also they are able to assist to their societies.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 239, Rule ID: NODT_DOZEN[1]
Message: Use simply: 'a hundred'.
Suggestion: a hundred
...buy a shampoo, foreign shampoo maybe is hundred dollars but a shampoo from your company...
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Line 5, column 407, Rule ID: SO_AS_TO[1]
Message: Use simply 'to'
Suggestion: to
...herefore, they may hire a lot of labors so as to produce plenty of goods quickly. As a r...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, furthermore, if, may, second, so, therefore, well, while, as to, for example, in addition, kind of, as a result, in my opinion, in other words
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 15.1003584229 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 9.8082437276 143% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 13.8261648746 51% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.0286738351 91% => OK
Pronoun: 61.0 43.0788530466 142% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 60.0 52.1666666667 115% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.0752688172 37% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2018.0 1977.66487455 102% => OK
No of words: 425.0 407.700716846 104% => OK
Chars per words: 4.74823529412 4.8611393121 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.54043259262 4.48103885553 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.48598451949 2.67179642975 93% => OK
Unique words: 181.0 212.727598566 85% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.425882352941 0.524837075471 81% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 608.4 618.680645161 98% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.59856630824 73% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.994623655914 0% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 8.0 3.51792114695 227% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.94265232975 162% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6003584229 87% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 20.1344086022 114% => OK
Sentence length SD: 50.8510594473 48.9658058833 104% => OK
Chars per sentence: 112.111111111 100.406767564 112% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.6111111111 20.6045352989 115% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.88888888889 5.45110844103 163% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8709677419 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.330892706653 0.236089414692 140% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.116072838077 0.076458572812 152% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0943883175518 0.0737576698707 128% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.255136234498 0.150856017488 169% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0907947238613 0.0645574589148 141% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.7 11.7677419355 108% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 65.05 58.1214874552 112% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.1575268817 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.57 10.9000537634 97% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.19 8.01818996416 90% => OK
difficult_words: 65.0 86.8835125448 75% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 10.002688172 90% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.0537634409 111% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 63.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 19.0 Out of 30
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