In some countries, teenagers have jobs while they are still students. Do you think this is a good idea?
As a person reaches adulthood, is faced to new opportunities and responsibilities. One of the most important decision to be made is about the incorporation to the labor market. Some people prefer to get a job once they have finished the university, whereas others start earlier while they are still students. However, considering several reasons, such as economic, personal development and wellness of the society, I believe that is better to get a job in an early stage of life.
Firstly, economic argument. Both, adults and teenagers need some money to go through the day; we all need to commute to University or word, to eat, etc. Following this way of thinking, there are two sources to pay our expenses, one is to ask money to our parents and second is earn that money. Therefore, if we earn enough we would be helping our parent and we will gain some economic independency. For example, you can party or travel or just getting around without bothering anybody.
Secondly, personal development. It is undoubtedly that be aware of how difficult is to earn the money that we spent, will end in a personal grow, in other words, maturity. Moreover, it will allows getting more knowledge about how the labor market works and this contributes to our personal development.
At the last, wellness of society. To achieve this goal we need both, to have more developed people and more economic activity. Whatever the type of work doing while they are student, contributes toward getting a better society.
To summarize, the people who start working while they are at university have many advantages, for instance, they can boost the economy, become more developed persons and contribute to make a better society. However, there are some disadvantages such as poor performance at university or a greater desertion, but I think this arguments does not have the power of change my view.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion: allow
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, firstly, however, if, moreover, second, secondly, so, still, therefore, well, whereas, while, for example, for instance, i think, such as, in other words
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 15.1003584229 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 9.8082437276 92% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 13.8261648746 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 11.0286738351 45% => OK
Pronoun: 29.0 43.0788530466 67% => OK
Preposition: 39.0 52.1666666667 75% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.0752688172 99% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1575.0 1977.66487455 80% => OK
No of words: 316.0 407.700716846 78% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.98417721519 4.8611393121 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.21620550194 4.48103885553 94% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.84605235725 2.67179642975 107% => OK
Unique words: 175.0 212.727598566 82% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.553797468354 0.524837075471 106% => OK
syllable_count: 513.9 618.680645161 83% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 9.59856630824 63% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.994623655914 0% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.6003584229 83% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 48.7210121428 48.9658058833 100% => OK
Chars per sentence: 92.6470588235 100.406767564 92% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.5882352941 20.6045352989 90% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.70588235294 5.45110844103 178% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 11.8709677419 67% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.215315735308 0.236089414692 91% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0576030774237 0.076458572812 75% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.076466215252 0.0737576698707 104% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.114459507427 0.150856017488 76% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0610934912983 0.0645574589148 95% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.3 11.7677419355 96% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 53.21 58.1214874552 92% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 10.1575268817 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.6 10.9000537634 106% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.18 8.01818996416 102% => OK
difficult_words: 73.0 86.8835125448 84% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 10.002688172 90% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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